A Faded Face

A reflection on lost lovers.

A Faded Face

My pillows never feel a warm embrace -
my pen is always dancing in the night;
trying to describe a faded face,
splashing paint on patterns black and white -
Photographs, to me, are never certain;
the walls from which they hang are mine alone.
Our laughing ghosts could never draw the curtains
on present day's interior abode -
Though feelings (good and bad) of you are fleeting,
and Summer may encapsulate my heart,
I wish for us to share another meeting,
And then perhaps I may wish to depart.
I only need to quell a thought recurring:
A faded face may be all that you are.

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

I love your first stanza- draws me in and makes me see all the images you use, yet communicates a melancholy too with pillows not feeling a warm embrace and the faded face. I also love the line about laughing ghosts/ interior abode- this communicates something I feel but can't articulate- I grasp at the meaning then just accept it as a phrase that makes sense to me even if I can't say how. Poetic and free. Moving in to your experience of the aftermath of meeting and the desire to meet again, no commitments, takes me back to the pillows and ghosts- like moving from dream to reality. And I also like the echo of the faded face, which ties it all up well for me. I like it- honest, magical, real, then grounded. Thank you!

[Saria Lon]

Thank you. I appreciative how in-depth your comments are. You definitely understand my mindset that went into writing these. I'm glad you like it! :D

[Peter Rogerson]

I know you'll think me pedantic, but a sonnet is really 8 lines plus 6 lines rather than 4+4+4+2. But I don't suppose that matters much when it comes to emotions and sense.

[Saria Lon]

Oh thanks, I didn't know that!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy how you use description.
"Though feelings (good and bad) of you are fleeting,
and Summer may encapsulate my heart,
I wish for us to share another meeting,
And then perhaps I may wish to depart."
I liked the above lines. Wishes and hope. Our final emotions and thoughts. Thank you Taylor for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Saria Lon]

Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Taylor.

[Sean Cairns]

A feeling I know all too well. Very well described and almost painful to read because of how relatable it is. Very well done.

[Saria Lon]

Thank you! It's a sad feeling to realize.

[Maddi]

Very good poem, it has a good flow to it. You should be proud.

[Saria Lon]

Aw thank you. Very kind :)