An Illusion

Some bizarre to you, usual to me feelings I've felt.

What I call is an illusion that has devoured every bit of my outer skin so far.

It has not quite touched my blood yet but it is still strong enough to make me dig my own grave,

and push me to what today's society refers, "a healthy euphoria in the lofty pinnacles of one's desires."

I'm still searching for the path that will lead to the superpowers, giving me insight and knowledge to murder my illusions.

I need it to pine away from my skin before it reaches my veins.

I need my bloods to free flow like an eminent warriors willpower but until then I'll just be an illusion nobody but I see.

Author's Note

Can you please comment on the style and language of poem and try to find what I'm implying.

P.S: "bloods" is intentional.

Reviews

[Jesse Gonzalez]

Okay, so from what I read... This is what I understood. The world feels like an illusion, or at least that that is what you're hoping, because the world is so cold and lonely. Society has its differences from what you agree with and from your beliefs and that the entire human race chase after their desires rather than their judgment of what is truly morally correct. You're searching for something, or someone which has power beyond human thought to lead you into a direction which will better suit yourself and your personality. You're feeling as if you're not real, not in this world or the next, because how can you be with this kind of reality in society? You're having these feelings that you've never really experienced and its hard feeling them for the first time, and your eyes are now opening to a new reality of how unimportant you may or may not be in the crazy world around us, or better, how unimportant everyone else seems to be. You feel like a new generation of superiority and that you are meant to be here for some reason that is right now unknown to you. I'm not sure if I'm hitting the right points here, but correct me if I am wrong.

[Sarcastic Prince]

Hey man, you hit me right in the feels until the point where you said "feelings that you've never really experienced", these are feelings that I need to live through every single second of my life. Your criticisms were very constructive and I really appreciate the time you've put into analysing what I have writen. You certainly did get half of the things I was implying and it doesn't mean that you're wrong for not finding out what I implied in the other half. Your commentary was amazing, keep being awesome and teach me how to write amazing commentaries like that because I'm gonna needing them for my AS Level. :D

[Jesse Gonzalez]

Yyou welcome, and hopefully next time I will be fully correct instead of only understanding half of the truth. I just used my feelings and experiences to comment on your piece of writing, that is probably the only reason why it was good. I got caught up in my feelings I guess. Wish I was a better writer but I am still learning!