Brownies

“What about knarls and Vixs?”

From the other side of the hall Damon lets out a dark booming laugh.  My lips knit together as he rises to his feet, ale in one hand, and rocks over to me, each step echoes loud and sturdy against the stone walls.  The hall silences, the flames flicker, and everyone turn their eyes to him.

                “You think your worst nightmares are knarls and Vixs?” Damon mocks as he strides towards me, “Pixies and Nymphs?” he cackles slamming his goblet on the table.  He kneels to my level and grabs me gruffly by the shoulder. “The real danger,” he eyes me closely before continuing.  My breath catches in my throat. “Is the wolves. “ His eyes glimmer dangerously. 

“They come in packs little lad, as the night falls and the trees grow dark. Sometimes you can’t tell if it’s the wind howling or not.  And when yer not lookin’ they’ll surround yeh quicker before you can think… and get yeh.”  I jump; a terrified whisper escapes through my lips. He chuckles and pats my shoulders before standing. 

                “When you’re out there!” He calls to the rest of the hall, “Deadrist isn’t just another forest.  All the stories your mothers told you of the creatures and monsters lurking in the dark are the likes of singsongs and too much wine!  It’s not the trolls that will crush you, but the tree’s… nor the pixies that will enchant you, but the flowers.”  He turns back to me and takes a swig out of his goblet. 

                “It’s not the knarls and Vixs you have to worry about little lad.  It’s what’s real, that’s dangerous.”

Author's Note

blip, unfinished, hows the scene

Reviews

[Dez H.]

Yo i love the way you started this it makes me want to read the rest when you get done. I'm a fan. good s**t ms lady.

[MoriartyMesa]

I assume this is part of a much larger piece, I liked it, but I am wondering what it will go with, love, tragedy, drama, comedy, you leave a lot of doors open.

[Dan Fite, Jr.]

The dialogue was good. The concept overall is interesting and could be built upon. However, I did feel it moved a little fast and the description of the main character (the one who is being spoken to by Damon) could be better. It would be nice to go more in depth and be more descriptive of her thoughts and feelings as all of this happens, perhaps her fears that build up as Damon continues to speak? Good story, but I would slow things down just a little bit. However, this is just a rough draft, so it's not that big of a deal and can always be fixed later ;)