A Pessimistic Life

The reality of life

is actually pretty sad

we laugh and we cry

we fight and we cut ties

we love and we lose

we are put down

only to be built back up

just to be put down

again and again

day after day

basically

it's the same cycle

yeah everyone is different

yeah nobody is the same

yeah our experiences differ

however

the truth will always remain the same:

We Live

and then

We Die

We

All

Die



Author's Note

Critiques and criticism always welcome. Thoughts on how I structured the poem?

Reviews

[La Tigresa]

Hello! I came across your request for a review in one of the groups that you joined and I'd love to take a look at your work. :) When you have the time I'd love it if you took a look at mine as well... but right now this is about you so *cracks knuckles* let's see whatcha got here...

I'm no expert in poetry so I'm sorry if my opinion is quite a bit uneducated. I'm gonna give it my best shot here.

I can appreciate the darkness in this, for one. I myself am not a fan of "happy" things, so to speak, and this is a pretty deep message, with the poet realizing that it doesn't matter what we do, the end is always the same. As for the structure of the poem, it didn't read like a poem to me (although like I said before I know nothing about poems- I know there are different types and I have no idea what category yours would fall under). When I say it didn't read like a poem I mean that it had no particular rhythm. No two lines seemed to be alike to me. Now, that doesn't bother me exactly, but perhaps you could make it more cohesive in that sense?

I hope my two very insignificant cents could help in some way, shape or form. :)

[maria ( rose)]

I think you did a wonderful job!