Another Bad Poem

Another Bad Poem

A Poem by SarahLin
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My Bad Poem....hope it makes the cut for the contest

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    So... I was walking down the boulevard with my orange flamingo,
 and my purple unicorn
apathetic to the nosy on lookers,
I continued while sending  them subliminal messages
to follow me to the brown & green castle
where they will be un-willing students
of my experiment (muah ha ha)
I used to study physics and thought
if my experiment works, next year
will be a lucrative fiscal year for me
I had to find a way to attract them to the castle ,
so I placed images of hamburgers and cotton candy
in their minds
Soon they will be opening the doors to discover.... .

It was at that exact moment the drugs
wore off and I woke up to the stark realization
 that everything was just
a holographic illusion of my imagination

© 2013 SarahLin


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Nothing bad about this ! @ all girly .. I'm surprised u needed the imagery of tasty burgers and the always desired cotton candy ... Purple unicorns usually posses the power to draw almost anyone in if looked right in the horn ?? Hhuummmm must be west LA or something ? Great piece and beautiful mind u have Ty for sharing this with us !!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


SarahLin

11 Years Ago

Thanks for checking me out. Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Lol .. what a funniest one you are. I didn't know you're a cool one too. I enjoyed reading this, i loved the ending when i read that it was a holographic illusion of yer creative mind. Good work, Sarah.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SarahLin

11 Years Ago

Us, I'm a little crazy cool too. Thank you
Neon

11 Years Ago

That's great because .. I love seeing someone as beautiful as you feel 'Crazy'.
I laughed... you drew me along well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SarahLin

11 Years Ago

Thanks for taking a read Chris. Glad I could bring a smile to your face.
HI Sarah, and sorry for the loss of this...glad you refound it!
It's not bad at all...and I remember begging, "Can I have it?" lol j/k

Thanks much!

Posted 11 Years Ago


SarahLin

11 Years Ago

Glad you stopped by . :)
well it might have got MY vote.....Crazy yet somehow quite plausible

Posted 11 Years Ago


SarahLin

11 Years Ago

Funny you should say that because I voted for yours...everything is plausible in my imagination ..
Dr. Wood ?

11 Years Ago

Imagination is everything in poetry, and thanks for the vote, see you at the next competition
Sarahlin, I thought I reviewed this one already but I guess I didn't. Very cool and sorry, there is nothing bad about this poem at all...but good luck anyway in the contest. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


SarahLin

11 Years Ago

Well, I didn't make the contest so I voted for Dr. Whos' poem. I don't remember where I saw it but .. read more
Jack...

11 Years Ago

Well just know, anything you write I will be there.

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Added on October 20, 2013
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What can I say about me..I'm fairly new here and I hope to use this forum as an outlet for my ever busy mind. You see, my mind is a clusterFck. At any given moment my mind is all over the place...hap.. more..

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