Missing You

      I miss you my love
     When you're away
     I think of you often
     Night & day

     I long for your touch
    To feel your kiss
    Our bodies entwined,
    Pure bliss......

Author's Note

Just trying my wings. This is my first attempt. Please share your thoughts. My own critique would be - to short.

Reviews

[Jibey]

Short and sweet... It says what you wanted to say with admirable brevity :-)

[SarahLin]

Thank you ~ I appreciate you stopping by ~

[Chris]

for me you touched the heart just right. I wondered though if the last line was even needed...you had already finely ended it with the line above. - just me thinking.

Came back

[SarahLin]

Sorry it took so long to respond..I appreciate your comment & thanks for stopping by...

[Antoñyo]

This reads like a nice whisper of "Oh, by the way, you should know..."
Nice to be told every now and then...at the least

[SarahLin]

I agree. it's nice to know when you are missed..

[Jack...]

Welcome to WC Sarahlin. In my opinion your poem is beautiful. It is only too short if you don't get your point across, which you did in wonderful fashion. Very nicely done, can't wait to see more from you.

[SarahLin]

Thank you for such a nice comment. I'm feeling a little more confident about writing more..

[Jack...]

Please let me know when you do.

[SarahLin]

I will & thanks again..

[ron]

This was very sensual. You expressed so much in just a few sentences.

[SarahLin]

Thank you Ron..I appreciate your input.

[ron]

You are most welcome Sarah.

[Chris]

Welcome to WC...sit and pause awhile. This was smooth and warm. A gentle thought.

[SarahLin]

Thank you Chris . Such a nice thing to say..

[Bare Trees]

Nice job for a first try. Like it.

[SarahLin]

Thank you so much..

[Bare Trees]

You are Welcome.

[Dye]

I think this is great for your first attempt. Sweet and not to short in my opinion. Nicely done ;)

[SarahLin]

Thank you Dye..