Eros

I welcomed you into my personal cosmos,

Beckoning to you with open, craving arms,

We glowed like moonlight, a pair of nocturnal lovers.

Consumed by longing for the touch of your velvet kisses

Against my pale, luminescent skin; delicate as the

Brush of a moth’s wing.

You traced a line along the contours of my body, painting me with your

Voracious artist’s eyes.

Your gentle words of admiration soothed my

Desirous, aching heart and enflamed my loins,

As we became a burning constellation, entwined

In our own clandestine universe.

Reviews

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

Clandestine Universe, wicked line. your paring of words is amazing, you give them such meaning, I love reading the work of writers who understand the importance of diction or who make their poetry surround such tool in order to stand out and make it unique, rather than challenging the reader in a need to feel competent.

[Sarah Conder]

Oh my, thank you :)

[Steve]

Can I make a suggestion. Please don't take offense.....sometimes its nice to add a phone. (I am a very visual reader and an accompanying phone can really add to a white.)

[Sarah Conder]

It may because I'm new to this website, but I'm not sure I understand your meaning of phone in this context...

[Steve]

sorry. I meant to type photo. This is just a suggestion. I hope it doesn't appear rude to suggest this.

[Sarah Conder]

Ah, I see! It's fine, I understand that some people enjoy having something visual as well, I think for the moment I'll just allow the reader to use their imagination :)

[Steve]

ok, That's fine. :0)

[The Verse: A Poetry Journal]

Yeah I have seen a few poets on this site add visual aids, Its alright certainly not my taste, let the lines speak for themselves, I commend your work Sarah Conder!

[Steve]

I think your work is great too. :0)

[zainul]

The experience of human life presented like animation.

[Karl Woof Junior]

WHY DID YOU STOP THIS PIECE, very few times things get cut off too early, i wanted to keep reading and reading this one... stunning, beautiful, gorgeous, infectious, delicious, potent, pick one that suits

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you ever so much! :)

[marty360]

This piece really paints a picture in my mind, I love it. I have felt like this once and your words really captures the moment I experienced. Well done :)

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you so much :)

[marty360]

You are most welcome :) feel free to view my works :)

[Sasha-lee]

I'm absolutely amazed by your use of words .. the visual it paints weakens ones heart

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you lovely :)

[Steve]

Mmmm. This was a sweet expereince! Very nicely and stylishly written too.

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it :)

[Simon Welsh]

I love the choice of words. There's a true feel of wanton desire. I like.

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you Elliott :)

[one sky]

So passionate. As Eros is the Greek God of love, this piece shows wonderfully the art of love-making...
"As we became a burning constellation, entwined
In our own clandestine universe."

Nice piece.

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you :)

[Richard]

it's very wistful!
it almost feels more passionate than the real thing can be hah
I thought this was great :)

[Sarah Conder]

On the contrary, I am a strong believer in those passionate feelings! Thank you :)

[Richard]

well, it's true ... and I've been in heated passionate moments lots of times I'm not a pessimist at all
I guess it's just been a long time and now ... I'm JADED :(
you're welcome it was a great poem :)