Bar Lights on Beaumont Street

In a darkened, squalid bar, lost among

Suburban city streets,

The Revellers and the Rioters convene on a Friday eve

In high spirits; a free-flowing fountain

Of vodka and whiskey, stagnant breath and the

Burnt out ashes of cigarettes.

The heavy stench of perspiration lingers;

A fetid miasma, hot, lurid,

Uncouth are the characters that embark

On their carousing expedition, consumed with vigour,

Intoxicated by the vibrations of sound;

The incessant thud, thud, thudding penetrating every pore.

Pounding.

Erratic flickering of bar lights

Hypnotise all into a trance of inhibition

Whilst all around,

Others sleep soundly in their beds.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Yes... I believe you hit this on the spot... at first I was like how is she writing this at 17 years of age... and the part:

The incessant thud, thud, thudding penetrating every pore.

So I would say the person is listening in on everything they are doing and saying... painting a scene of the bar life...

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you :)

[Steve]

Well said. I've been on both ends of that scenario. :0)

You have a nice style.

[Troy Henson]

A great depiction of a night out at the local. You captured the mood, the imagery was brilliant and dre me into this place. Like a dream I came a long for the ride. Nicely done.

Regards
Troy

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you very much!

[SyberRose]

This brought back memories of when I was a little girl; my father worked in a bar and we lived upstairs...and you described the setting so well dear...lights cigs,music...and I cold stay up late on Fridays since my dad was working late...nicely done Sarah..I just love your work...Rose

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you Rose, your comments are always so lovely :)

[Wolfwind]

I loved how this captured an amazing few moments in time and exploded it into something much more vibrant and intense. Like a fly on the wall, the bar light sees and watches everything, capturing all within it's flicker rays. What I felt was really cool is that your words took something out of reality and really painted it in a way the pulls the soul in and creates the desire to step into that scene.

Great Ink!
Aaron

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you for your lovely words of praise, it means a lot!

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

WOW, I can see how those poets have influenced you, but even then your work is very personal and authentic, can't wait to get to the others.

[Sarah Conder]

Thank you m'dear :)