A Dying Poet's Sacrifice

A slam poem

So you say there’s something wrong with me 

From the lyrics of the song I sing 

To the mirrors we anoint as kings 

Choke on words- but you’re still breathing 

Retreating-  

Into the shadows we’re made of 

Worship obsession and call it love 

How can you say you’ve had enough? 

When your whole life you’ve lived on luck?  

I choke on words and suffocate 

Dreaming of worlds we could create

  

I tried to fit in and ended up deformed 

Whipped like an animal and forced to perform 

They hailed me as a royal with the crown of thorns 

A slave to the system since the day I was born  

So scream in my face for the lyrics I sing! 

I bleed the words God gave me 

Tear myself apart for entertainment 

And you labeled me insanity 

You don’t know what it means to breathe! 

To let the emotions cut in deep 

-Let them pierce your skin till you start to bleed 

And rip your heart out for the world to see 

As Edgar said, we’ve loved alone 

I keep telling you, this isn’t my home 

Somewhere out there I’ll find myself 

Maybe before I kill myself 

Maybe then I’ll find my peace 

And the pain inside will start to ease  

There’s only so much blood one can bleed 

My writings a threat, but only to me

Author's Note

People tend to forget how a writer can get lost in their works. Tearing one’s heart out over and over for entertainment can get tiresome. One can only bleed so much before they give in to the tiredness, and let go. It’s about depression, madness and losing hope...

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Well, Sarah Dear 🤔

I can certainly say this much, "If you keep writing with this much open honesty, using as powerful emotion and communicating skills as you've spewed-forth in every expressive line of this rave, you'll never have to worry about going insane, because no unconscious or unaware person wrote all this fastastical piece of poetic brilliance!"
It took being there, doing that, and my hat's off to you for turning out so damned skilled and able, despite what may have worked against it … shows what a strong and determined spirit you surely have.

I bow with great admiration and respect to you, Lady Sarah.
Thank you for the blast of reality every serious poet should read.
Hugs 'n blessings! ⁓ Richard 🍃

(I'd rate you 200/100 for this, if I could. Hm? I guess I just did.) 😏

[LazerRays]

Ah thank you Richard, my head is swelling! I think I can take organized chaos to construct slam poetry, and often or feels trapped in their mind. Thank you for the lovely review

[Richard🖌]

A lovely pleasure, Sarah.

[Connie L. Kuntz]

I want you to know I needed your sacrificial words today...your open honesty gives me hope because I have often hid my true feelings from the world in order to fit in, only to find i'm killing myself slowly to be loved by people who will never understand me...and to be quite blunt, people who i really don't want to know on a deeper level, because those people are actually pretty shallow. Thank you for sharing your poetry!

[LazerRays]

And thank you for reviewing and readin my poetry. It means a lot that someone can relate to my works :))

[Unspoken poet]

I so love the last stanza, this is so very well written and said.
Deep and full of heart....

[LazerRays]

Thank you very much for your review :)

[AllenS]

So scream in my face for the lyrics I sing!
I bleed the words God gave me
Tear myself apart for entertainment
And you labeled me insanity

The poet is the only true observer of their lyric. We "tear ourselves apart" or open our dark thoughts to "entertain" or share openly that others may explore or recognize their mutual human journey.

Frankly, many are not up to the opportunity we offer. The odd thing to me is that it surprises me when they miss what I am attempting to say and thus the opportunity.

Thank you for your bravery.

[LazerRays]

Yes, or they underestimate it. I’m a world like now, we’re becoming more disconnected with technology that we aren’t in touch with our spirit. How disappointing it is when the feelings and depth of poetry gets filled down to pathetic meaning in their minds? Thank you for your review

[Chris]

A strong and expressive statement of you...

[LazerRays]

Thank you chris

[Sami Khalil]

This is immense and powerful Sarah. Very emotive and bleeding. It will be all ok and please never lose hope. We all have to struggle and survive among all those ups and downs. Your emotions do run deep and your will is sharp and steep.

[LazerRays]

Hahaha thank you for the reviews :) this is actually an attack on someone. A slam poem against all those who will never understand the bloodshed it takes to write. As I say, someone can choke on words but they’re STILL breathing. Whereas writers suffocate. I’m showing their weakness, because is writers, we rip emotions out of our very hearts; blood and gore- but all for the glory of entertaining others

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! The hell with those types. If they offer a positive advice, then by all means. When it becomes personal, then away they should go. Kudos...

[LazerRays]

Hahaha I wish! Be safe, my friend!

[Sami Khalil]

::::::))))))))

[Sami Khalil]

"I choke on words and suffocate
Dreaming up worlds we could create

I tried to fit in and ended up deformed"

[Sami Khalil]

"From the lyrics of the song I sing
To the mirrors we anoint as kings
Choke on words- but you’re still breathing"

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Hey Sarah! So dearie this was a a greatly expressive poetry. Apart from poetry you're reflecting your strength. Its a skill to be creative in pain, the one who makes it out exceeds the world.
With lots of love and wishes of Good luck

[LazerRays]

Thank you so much! That was kind of you. I end up bleeding a lot; it hurts. Thank you again for stopping by, message me sometime if you want 😁😁

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Sure anytime... You're like a little sis. :)

[LazerRays]

Haha thank you- tho we the same age

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Great poem very deep loved it

If you get a chance read famous historic poet Henry Lawson poem called the last review
He wrote hundreds and he quoted Some of them and his characters and places in this poem as he lay dying in the poem poetically speaking

Well worth a squiz ( a look) Aussie slang

[LazerRays]

Huh, I will be glad to check him out. Nothing better than a self destruction piece, eh? Haha. Thank you for your kind review! Much appreciated!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

No it wasn’t written when he died maybe just in his old age but the poem set on his deathbed well worth a read