Fall Apart

Know I'll never be enough
Thats what tears me apart
When I break into a million pieces
-Cradling the remnants of my heart

Can anybody see me-
Or am I hidden by the dark?
When I bleed for the entire realm
Making wishes on those afar

Look into my empty eyes
Reflected by the scars  
Staring numb like shattered glass
-Watching my whole world fall apart

Author's Note

I dunno

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

We are moving too fast in our world dear Saree.
"Look into my empty eyes
Reflected by the scars
Staring numb like shattered glass
-Watching my whole world fall apart"
The above lines are strong and important. I have slowed down and I lead with kindness, concern and I listen. Most of us learn the hard way to pay attention to the people we loved. Powerful and worthwhile words shared.
Coyote

[Katrina Mckeown]

Such emotion, you are most definitely enough, don't think for one minute you're not! I love this poem and I agree Edgar Allan Poe has sent some vibes your way, this is indeed a master piece , well written with brilliant use of imagery.

[LazerRays]

Thank you for the compliment so much! I do have to live up to the god of poetry himself, you know. We have a lot of characteristics in common, I do say, both good and bad. It melts my heart to hear you say I’m enough. Thanks for your kindness!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think behind the apparent emptiness there is much behind those eyes...for there is much behind your pen...and i think at times we all fall apart thinking we just aren't good enough for the world...
a powerful write.
j.

[LazerRays]

Thank you Jacob, there is a lot of emptiness in my eyes- and a lot of falling apart. Thank you again!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Hellloooo stranger!!!
Here we are. And how are we? Went through this poem and I looove just love the image of eyes like shattered glass. Novel. Original. I love word play on eyes becoz mine shine like gimlets in the dark and my mistress uses them like a torch to find her slippers. Doesn't even treat me to any crab cream or chicken liver nuggets the mean thing. Btw. You're too good to be falling apart for anyone. They're all a***holes. High fives gurrl. Meeeooowww.

[LazerRays]

I fall apart for the world haha, not individuals. Kinda hard to live in an invisible world if you know what I’m saying. Thanks for your review, meow meow meow (that’s a secret so no one knows what we’re saying)

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So Edgar Allen Poe just blessed you :). Sending this for featuring?... hope you got the form, that's only for RC's. I'll add you in the collaborator's list with your first poem. Excited! Haven't received a response yet so just making sure it reached you.
For the poem, loved it! The second stanza needs a bit work but for now it's great, keep on writing. We'll keep adding them in our blog. And I have plans for collab in April, so are you joining me? :)

[LazerRays]

Of course I will haha!
And yeah the second stanza I don’t really know what to do with- but thank you for the point out

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Published! You can check it... get the site URL from my profile if you don't have it.
Thank You!

[AJNJ]

You should know :)
You write dark pretty well for someone your age. Carry on and you’ll blow ‘em all away some day soon. Very good.



Btw...When I really love a poem I usually give it 100/100 as I did here. Unlike some others who say "loved it" and either don't boost it or slyly mark it down. :)

Protect your work.

[LazerRays]

Thank you very much for your review :D

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When our world is falling apart. It not must be just negative experience. All things and living forms including us have own expiring date. In every end is new begining , new form and new hope. Maybe at this new it will be more light and more enchantment . All the best and keep living.

[LazerRays]

Thank you very much :D It can be quite beautiful (in a sadistic way) to watch your world crumble

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Yes and from this crumbles you can make new beautiful world of true imagination .

[Chris Shaw]

You appear to be a really sensitive caring soul. This is a beautiful poem. Don't be so hard on yourself, of course you can be enough. If you feel you aren't you are not doing justice to your own uniqueness.

Chris

[LazerRays]

Thank you Chris! Ah I see you’ve been around and I haven’t had the time to stop by :(
I’ll put that on my mental schedule, hear me, I will stop by!
Thank you for your review and for the kind words. Take care now :)