Universe

Universe

A Poem by LazerRays

If not you, who will remember my dreams-? 
When I lay in lifeless December streams,  
Eyes closed in slumber, tell me what does life mean? 
There has to be more than the universe deems!  

Come lay with me on the frost-kissed ground- 
A night world broken; sadly crying in sound,
 Can you hear them whisper in the air all around? 
Like faded faces who longed to be found-  

Someday we'll burn off like the stars- 
Those we long to be close are getting too far- 
Will we keep viewing life as a bursting quasar-? 
Feeding on energy until it tears us apart? 

 Will the Universe keep going; keep moving on-? 
When death comes for me- will I truly be gone?

© 2022 LazerRays


Author's Note

LazerRays
Life after death- hm.

Saree (Ray) :

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Wonderful, I particularly the star as symbolism for the growing distance between ourselves and our loved ones.

Posted 3 Years Ago


LazerRays

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review
Sarah, You pose the eternal questions so eloquently. The rhythm, rhyme, and thematic memory of your poem is expertly employed. I really like your works.

Posted 4 Years Ago


LazerRays

4 Years Ago

Thanks Allen. Was inspired by Poe and Robert Frost :)
What a question Sarah. Its the one we've been asking since we learned to speak. I'm glad you've left the question open because we all have different answers. I know my answer but I'm not telling! You've given us a great poem here and made us reflect on our mortality.
Take care.
Alan

Posted 4 Years Ago


LazerRays

4 Years Ago

I could never end off with something not a question. No one knows what the world has in store for us.. read more
WOW! Very powerful write, you have a wonderful talent for writing

Posted 4 Years Ago


LazerRays

4 Years Ago

Thank you! All in the name for Edgar Allan Poe!
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You are so natural poet Sarah! I'll save this for our blog Posts.

Posted 4 Years Ago


LazerRays

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much MC
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4 Years Ago

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I ponder often if there is life after death .. will we be remembered or forgotten. I haven’t forgotten my mother or grandfather yet and they have been gone many years .
I think it’s a fear we all have of a vast nothingness when our time comes and we are done. One thing is for sure, we will find out when the time comes. Hopefully acts of kindness and our poetry will live on when we’re gone.

Posted 4 Years Ago


LazerRays

4 Years Ago

Hamlet once put death into perspective by summing up that we rather suffer in a world we know rather.. read more
Katrina Mckeown

4 Years Ago

Since Hamlet says we suffer in this world and I wholeheartedly agree that we do, so now I’m ponder.. read more
LazerRays

4 Years Ago

Perhaps so, from the ash to the ash.
this is really awesome! i love it!

Posted 5 Years Ago


i like this because i often wonder what there is after this life...what exactly is there?
will we be remembered, forgotten? is there something spiritual afterward or do we just lie in the ground and rot until we are just bones?
at least we hope our poetry might be that star that still shines from the heavens even if we don't.
j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

thank you Jacob! yeah! I often wonder too, and sometimes i see death as this black void we never ret.. read more
This is not just a gem among pebbles, this is a cry for help that is so beautifully put.....and one such cry I've made so much my voice is hoarse. Stanza 1 Line 3 would still flow smoothly if you take out the "does" and tag an "s" onto "mean" to better the rhyme progression. But, Sarah, this is beautiful, and if only the universe could answer the cries of the shadows. Lord knows we need to be found. Well done!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

thank you for your suggestion! i do wish the universe would answer our cries, im one who needs to kn.. read more
emipoemi

5 Years Ago

I've been wallowing in this hole for 17 years.....I'm def ready for the light.
Just think of one,, we will find out. Very well written and well expressed

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

THank you Kesch :D

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Spit truth, bleed emotion, fight for love, hold to your morals



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Old username: Sarah_Allen_Poe am a former stimulant addict who has found new life and meaning through psychedelics. I enjoy late night longboarding, cooking, astronomy, DDR, retro video .. more..

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