Universe

If not you, who will remember my dreams-? 

When I lay in lifeless December streams,  

Eyes closed in slumber, tell me what does life mean? 

There has to be more than the universe deems!  

Come lay with me on the frost-kissed ground- 

A night world broken; sadly crying in sound,

 Can you hear them whisper in the air all around? 

Like faded faces who longed to be found-  

Someday we'll burn off like the stars- 

Those we long to be close are getting too far- 

Will we keep viewing life as a bursting quasar-? 

Feeding on energy until it tears us apart? 

 Will the Universe keep going; keep moving on-? 

When death comes for me- will I truly be gone?

Author's Note

Life after death- hm.

Saree (Ray) :

Reviews

[Just Kim]

I enjoyed the rhyme scheme, the flow is spot on, quite an emotional read though

[LazerRays]

Thank you Kim

[The dark Hydra]

I get board of reading s**t got anything that doesn't belong in the trash?

[LazerRays]

Yeh got one just for you:

"suck it"

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[Nix is typing...]

@The Dark Hydra OH MY F*****G GOD, WHY DOES YOUR NASTY A*S HAVE TO TROLL ON EVERYONE'S F*****G WORK?! WHAT THE HELL'S THE MATTER WITH YOU??? You need to resolve those damn issues you got going on at home somewhere else! THEN GO TO F*****G SCHOOL BECAUSE YOUR GRAMMAR AND YOUR SPELLING SUCKS MAJOR BOOTYHOLE!!! Also, smartass, you spelled "Bored" wrong.

[LazerRays]

Hahaha @Nix, did he troll you too? I find it funny to be honest. So I call him a friend. I don't mind the troll, thanks tho. :)))

[Nix is typing...]

Lol, okay then. No, he hasn't trolled me, YET. But I've seen him on other things, trolling a shitton of other people. I just...I dunno I think you're cool, so I was just kinda tryna stand up for you? I know you probably don't need it Ray, but I just felt the need. :) If you've seen the recent poems I posted, you'd know why I felt the need to stand up, yanno?

[LazerRays]

I haven't seen them but I definitely will. Thanks for thinking I'm cool, I think you're cool too. Thanks for standing up for me. Me and the hydra kinda go back, so I know what they're feeling rn. I don't agree with their trolling but I can't do anything about it

[Nix is typing...]

Ahhh, I gotchu. And thanks! I'll put my word ammunition away. For now. I just don't like it when people troll others because they got other s**t going on in their lives that makes them unhappy. It makes me mad.

[LazerRays]

Understandable

[The dark Hydra]

Haven't decide yet if y'all a******s or if I'm just not getting some magical point cus I see a lot of b*****s up in here bitchin bout the biggest b***h in here (sorry saree).

[LazerRays]

You dont have to apologize hydra lol. And okay

[LazerRays]

We had a good slam fight, so I wouldn't call me a b***h. We're both slam poets, let's focus on that

[Laura Kate]

Wonderful, I particularly the star as symbolism for the growing distance between ourselves and our loved ones.

[LazerRays]

Thank you very much for your review

[AllenS]

Sarah, You pose the eternal questions so eloquently. The rhythm, rhyme, and thematic memory of your poem is expertly employed. I really like your works.

[LazerRays]

Thanks Allen. Was inspired by Poe and Robert Frost :)

[alanwgraham]

What a question Sarah. Its the one we've been asking since we learned to speak. I'm glad you've left the question open because we all have different answers. I know my answer but I'm not telling! You've given us a great poem here and made us reflect on our mortality.
Take care.
Alan

[LazerRays]

I could never end off with something not a question. No one knows what the world has in store for us after we die. Only God. All I can do is sit and wonder. Thank you for your review

[poetgurl]

WOW! Very powerful write, you have a wonderful talent for writing

[LazerRays]

Thank you! All in the name for Edgar Allan Poe!

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You are so natural poet Sarah! I'll save this for our blog Posts.

[LazerRays]

Thank you very much MC

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[Katrina Mckeown]

I ponder often if there is life after death .. will we be remembered or forgotten. I haven’t forgotten my mother or grandfather yet and they have been gone many years .
I think it’s a fear we all have of a vast nothingness when our time comes and we are done. One thing is for sure, we will find out when the time comes. Hopefully acts of kindness and our poetry will live on when we’re gone.

[LazerRays]

Hamlet once put death into perspective by summing up that we rather suffer in a world we know rather than venture on a journey unreturnable into the unknown. Thank you for your review!!!

[Katrina Mckeown]

Since Hamlet says we suffer in this world and I wholeheartedly agree that we do, so now I’m pondering what happens
to us after death, are we Just ashes to ashes dust to dust ? Does our spirit not live on after we’re gone .
You are most welcome for the review.

[LazerRays]

Perhaps so, from the ash to the ash.

[Morgan]

this is really awesome! i love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this because i often wonder what there is after this life...what exactly is there?
will we be remembered, forgotten? is there something spiritual afterward or do we just lie in the ground and rot until we are just bones?
at least we hope our poetry might be that star that still shines from the heavens even if we don't.
j.

[LazerRays]

thank you Jacob! yeah! I often wonder too, and sometimes i see death as this black void we never return from. Though, i am Christian so I believe in Heaven. But, death is always different to everyone. Thanks for your review :D