The brutality and the harsh reality of a relationship gone wrong. But both don't walk away or give up on it. But seem to relish in the darkness and drawing of blood. Like those, it's one-upmanship. Tit for tat game. Mental games like this destroy lives. The destruction that is controlling and sick. But seem to also be a drug they both need and want. A twisted world for twisted people. Trapped in their own twisted minds.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
yes yes thats exactly that! im glad you could see that Dawn, thank you so much for the review :D
wow..blistering caustic relationships ... pain and attraction ,, affliction of ... the remission for .. all there in straight forward words ... V 1 L3 & 4 to me are especially hard hitting ... the image of her willing to give everything ..."wrists" offered then pulled by him into his own cell and chained is such a graphic image ..i can see it ..smell the dank of it ... its an illness ... bred from somewhere i do no know ... closing is poignant as that dim flicker of soul nears being extinguished ... your poem drew me in .. too many people, i imagine, are hooked on this kind of destruction :(((
E.
Like the two way script of this, and the bloody ending asking the question.
Are you going to save me or not.
The fire is out, question answered.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you paul, I'm glad you noticed that :) it's always a horror to go through betrayal. Thanks for.. read moreThank you paul, I'm glad you noticed that :) it's always a horror to go through betrayal. Thanks for your review and for stopping by :D
I hope you'll forgive me for mentioning this but I can't resist - this piece reminded me of that song 'Wolves' by Selena Gomez :x
The 'you' here seems like a heartless person, or like you once said, someone who gets pleasure out of hurting or seeing the ones they love get hurt. And I still have trouble accepting someone can be that way. There's got to be a conscience in everyone, right?... or idk, if they like it when you hurt, they don't really love you...
I'm reading too much into this but I'm touched, as always.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Interesting, I don't see wolves in this at all.... That's cool how you see it that way :)
A.. read more Interesting, I don't see wolves in this at all.... That's cool how you see it that way :)
And it just means that it was a traumatizing betrayal and leaving a person behind, broken to pieces. If you listen to black dahlia you'll hear the exact tone of this poem. Thank you yumna!
I like the pointed question. It personalizes the exchanges driving them deep, just in case the perpetrator is to dull or blind to ramifications.
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you! Ah, I'm sad that your first impression of me was my not good poem X((((((( ah well thank .. read moreThank you! Ah, I'm sad that your first impression of me was my not good poem X((((((( ah well thank you for stopping by with that lovely review! :D thanks!
You might say this one is something other than Pollyanna. It seems to refer to self mutilation, murder, suicide, blame and self loathing. As if that weren't enough, the author's note states the work was inspired by a song called "Black Dahlia," a legendary Hollywood mutilation and murder story. How Jack the Ripper got left out of this one I cannot say, but I hope the poet will give the old boy some consideration in the future. On the other hand, it was both well rhymed and gripping.
Yes!!!!! I'm glad you remembered Eliz.. read moreHahahahaha I wl take that into consideration ;)
Yes!!!!! I'm glad you remembered Elizabeth Shorts murder! The song is named for her. Tsk tsk, the case is intriguing! Thank you for stopping by and perhaps I will include jack ;)
5 Years Ago
Do consider Jack, especially his sense of humor. The boy was a real cutup.
Spit truth, bleed emotion, fight for love, hold to your morals
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