The Smoke of my Fire

The Smoke of my Fire

A Poem by LazerRays
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hmm... the idea of how smoke lives off a dying fire

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Why do you suffocate me?
When your heart departs my fire, 
You live like smoke off my fading embers,
As Apollo and his lyre,

You sing your dark melody,
As each log still chars to pyre,
Like the smoke rises from sullen ashes,
My death is your own desire,

You parasite, you Judas,
When I call you out, you liar,
You escape like smoke of my fallen breath,
Singing your charms of the choir,

© 2019 LazerRays


Author's Note

LazerRays
I like the idea of smoke living off a dying fire. Seems kinda cool :P

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for one the flames, the ashes are still smoldering...and that person can't let go...
the other wants the fire totally extinguished so she can move on...
sometimes just a small match can create chaos in the end.
j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob! That is a lovely review you have there :) I'm smiling because you got it. Thank you.. read more
No smoke without fire.
Just as you think it's dead, it strikes.

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Yes indeed Paul, it does! Thank you for that comment and reading this :)
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Rye
WOW!! Smokin' deep here but really well written. You sure got the point across.
Love your last stanza a lot.

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you! That means a lot, I am gonna work on this poem a bit haha. Thanks for reading and reviewi.. read more
A wonderful poem. Gave life and vision to your words. Fire, powerful and never the same movement. A interesting poem dear Sarah. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much coyote :D that means a lot!
LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much coyote :D that means a lot!
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome Sarah.
This was beautiful. Might be my favourite poem of yours so far. The imagery, and passion shine through. The idea is good, and your rhymes were simple, yet wholesome and full. This could easily be lyrics for a song, and the flow and rhythm work well. 10/10

Posted 5 Years Ago


LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much Jack! That really means a lot! Would you like to collab sometime? Anytime you'd li.. read more
R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)

5 Years Ago

For sure! If you have an idea for a collab, hit me up. I'll let you know if anything comes to mind f.. read more
LazerRays

5 Years Ago

Yeah ok! And vice-versa!

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Added on February 12, 2019
Last Updated on February 13, 2019
Tags: smoke, fire, dying, betrayal, parasite

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LazerRays
LazerRays

Spit truth, bleed emotion, fight for love, hold to your morals



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Old username: Sarah_Allen_Poe am a former stimulant addict who has found new life and meaning through psychedelics. I enjoy late night longboarding, cooking, astronomy, DDR, retro video .. more..

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