From Far Away

I chased a dream, a vision, a hope blindly. And now that my eyes are open to see reality...

I feel like I've been viewing you from a telescope,
Cause now you're so far away,
I want to grasp you like I once did,
But somehow as I looked forward,
You got left behind,
All I can do is see the dot of your existence,
A smudge of my sight,
And I can't move backwards,
Because time holds me like a prison,
Now I only watch what I once had stumble down this path,

My friend? Oh I lost her-
She got confused along the way,
Cause I ran ahead,
My love? I lost them too-
They couldn't keep up,
I was chasing this crazy dream,
My head in the clouds,

They all say I just kept running,
Like a wild child I couldn't keep still,
Broke my leash and took off after a vision,
Trying to get that dream I just kept chasing,

But now reality has hit me,
And I fell bak into the timeline,
From far away your problems may look small...

From far away you may seem ahead...
But what's the point if from far away you're only a slave to loneliness?
What's the point if you've left behind the things that make your life matter?

Author's Note

Meh. I don't write for the publicity so I have no apologies if it sucks. I write for the fun not the kicks.

Reviews

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I relate much to this. If you’re running faster, chasing something elusive, chances are it will take you away from things that supposedly matter. But if they really did, there would be no chasing of dreams. Some people can’t help it. Their brains (and mine) are just wired that way. They do need to keep running. Can’t be still, can’t be in one place. There’s always something more to achieve. Loneliness is a by-product of that flight. I am trying to like my own company. Most days, it’s not too bad. Another good read for me here. Thanks Sarah

[LazerRays]

Thank you for your review so much! i appreciate it!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You are welcome :)

[Arriam]

I 100% relate to your lack of apology in the end. This is magnificent, there's only one typo and it's

"But now reality has hit me,
And I fell bak into the timeline,"

Bak should be back. Otherwise, lovely!

Arriam

[LazerRays]

Aw thanks for pointing that out. And thanks for the review!

[Simone Davis]

Dreams are not a bad thing but I do think it's how we go about getting to our dreams, especially shunning our friends to get there. Nice poem.

[H L Rose]

Not sure if I can figure out how to say this but this whole thought progression comes across so fluidly if that makes sense. It's like you just started thinking in metaphors and ran with it, but it all made sense. My mind isn't that clean and clear and I envy you.

"And I can't move backwards,
Because time holds me like a prison, "
I like these line the most I think. I also really like the third stanza.

I enjoyed reading!

[H L Rose]

Ya'lls puns...I'm dead

[LazerRays]

Thank you so much for the review! Yeah, it was this metaphor stuck in my head. I had gone jogging and thinking angrily about how I lost so many friends because I didn't pay attention to the present. And I was in this feild and saw this one random white tree really far away and idk- it just stuck with me.


Ps, I'm glad you like the puns, feel free to add your own lol

[H L Rose]

I totally get it. I did that a lot especially in middle school and early high school and lost friends.

Lol I probably would but it wont let me comment. :/

[LazerRays]

What? Why not? That's so weird... Haha

[H L Rose]

Yea it's whatever haha

[barleygirl]

I'm the kind of reader who looks at Authors Notes before reading the posting. Your authors note felt a little defensive to me & this is totally not necessary, becuz you are being non-apologetic about something that is NOT a problem! Your writing is totally uninhibited & imaginative & honest & authentic. I encourage you to NOT put off your readers by making these silly noises about your reason for writing. You could say the same thing in a more positive way. Just own it. Be the writer you want to be & stop explaining or refusing to apologize. Nobody expects you to apologize. Your writing is very good & stimulating & interesting, so just have fun & don't worry (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[LazerRays]

im more of a negative person anyways... eh.

[LazerRays]

but thanks for the review

[The Immortal Phoenix]

It does not suck. Vacuum Cleaners and hookers suck. this is wonderful.

[LazerRays]

thank you so much micky! that means a lot. :P

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Thanks i thought you needed a laugh

[LazerRays]

:D thanks i did

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Sorry about our pun war Poe. I laughed so hard. But now it wont let me comment no more. I think my puns broke it.

[LazerRays]

We definitely crashed this site hahaha XD I enjoy it too. Perhaps another war sometime would be nice ;)
See ya around Micky mouse!

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Bie Kung-fu panda

[LazerRays]

Why that? Haha

[The Immortal Phoenix]

You know Poe the kung fu panda

[LazerRays]

Oh- haha! I haven't seen that movie in forever :P

[Dr. YumnaKay]

What's the point..yeah, I guess, at one point in our life, that's all it comes down to, and all that we can think of.
It always boggles me when I think whether we are the ones left behind or the ones going ahead. Harder to differentiate but has the same effect.
Time does hold us like prison. I like that.
Nicely penned, Sarah. And I can relate in a way.
Idk anyone who writes for kicks btw, do you? ;)

[LazerRays]

lol. writing for kicks haha- youre probably thinking shoes arent you hahah.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Of course. What would a simple Pakistani like me know about kicks. Haha

[LazerRays]

idk, what would you know? perhaps you could look it up in the dictionary :P hahaha ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, that's what I'm gonna do. Lol but you nicked mine ;)

[LazerRays]

and when did this happen? haha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahem .......

[LazerRays]

ahem what? i need to know. if i stole your dictionary... thats evil. i cant be evil. HAHAHA

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm outta words already 'cause I don't have it. :( lol
I think you are 😎😈😂

[LazerRays]

whhhhhhatttt? hahaha

[LazerRays]

you think im evil? jerk hahah

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Glad you figured it out ;) :p

[LazerRays]

;( tore me. i now fall to pieces on the floor.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Fall as in, the fall fall or just fall? :P

[LazerRays]

as in, im trolling you again with puns

[Dr. YumnaKay]

What's new there 😐

[LazerRays]

nothing. but youre falling a bit behind. havent you gotten used to me?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Gotten used to you? Haha yes. :D

[The Immortal Phoenix]

you have got to be more spontaneous Poe.

[LazerRays]

what? why?

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Because i have you "Stumped" like a tree

[The Immortal Phoenix]

No comeback I thought you liked this "Punny" war

[LazerRays]

..... NICCCCEEEEEEE. Why dont you just LEAVE me?

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Um okay. P.S like your work, like this war so I commented on it but im leaving now

[LazerRays]

ok hahaha. byyyeeeee lol. this was fun

[LazerRays]

it was a pun bro, leaf, leave? hahaha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

And here, I was under the impression that this was a friendly banter between me and you, Sarah 😑😛 lol you have a way of people misunderstanding you 😂

[The Immortal Phoenix]

My god, if you were a tree you would be an Oak tree because that was "acorn-y" comment

[The Immortal Phoenix]

I'm sorry I should have not commented that was not oaky

[LazerRays]

youre such a birch! but your bark is worse than your bite

[LazerRays]

im guessing you wont accept a treety?

[The Immortal Phoenix]

I probable wood.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

You actually had me rooted to the spot for a second.

[LazerRays]

This is such treeson! I thought you were my friend! You're even more of a beech than I thought! I don't think I can log into WC without thinking how sappy you are!

[The Immortal Phoenix]

That seems like a sticky situation.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Yew need to spruce this up and quit pineing for attention

[LazerRays]

You're pun rootine is failing a bit. I can help you get a bit more poplar if you want. I am literally face palming so without further a dew, I'm done with this elementree school behavior! I maple my friend request from you.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Man I feel like a rock star. It is set in stone.All the best things in life our taken for granite.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

Do my puns rock your world?

[LazerRays]

Changing subjects are we? This is getting hard! Are you stoned? Or are you always this dense? Just stop talcing already!

[LazerRays]

You better stop ore else! This if getting to be tatonic! You must of hit rock bottom to be this bould!