Echo

words can echo on and on

Sometimes I find

That the echoes inside,

Oh the echoes, they

Follow, follow

The crowd.

They are pigeons with messages

Tied to their backs

And they follow the makers

Of silent attacks.

Yes, they follow,

Follow, follow

Through diamond backs ridges and valleys.

Through caverns they echo,

The echoes

They follow,

Follow, follow.

The sound of the gunshots,

The protesting shouts,

The echoes of anger,

They roar through the silent night.

Hate, hate,

It follows, follows,

Like an echo,

Or a spy,

Oh, it follows

So silently.

Echoes, they reach

Every ear within range.

Filling the distance to preach

To the deaf of heart.

The echoes

Follow, follow,

The weak and they wait

To penetrate all who will listen

To echoes,

Dead echoes,

Dead memories of hate.

 

Author's Note

another quick one, tell me if you like the idea of it.

oh, and im trying to get an idea for a story, does anyone have a suggestion?

Reviews

[Lyr J. Thirsk]

dead echoes that linger....words perusing randomly in minds and spread as viruses negatlively or flirtatious glances for the good.....you ask if the idea is sound or good? its wonderful and you have a style whicih reflect the course of the theme itself...reading it is like listening to echoes and certain lines resonate even now, deriding and displaceing the normality of thoughts...which induces like a drug-swept high...a drug of idea!

the talent you have is fearful in its abundance...your potential seeths...you have art inside you...as your true self...

wonderful poem!
jake

[Travis Lawrence]

Great flow and pace, I read it out loud and liked the way it sounded very much. There's something so chilling about the way you repeat "echo" and "follow" so much. Just the tone of the words, I think, makes them this way. I liked it. And as for a story idea, well, I'm not much of a fiction writer, not so sure I can help with that.

Have a nice day!

[Erin Sky]

This is great - and the idea is very cool, bien sur.

[Andromeda]

love the idea. i especially like the last few lines. great rhythm.... hmmm short story ideas. what i do when i want to read short stories is just read a bunch of really good ones (Matheson, Poe, and Bradbury are my faves) until i get completely inspired.

[Brenda Sue]

I love the imagery in this piece. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Shadows of Sight]

This was wonderful I loved the echo effect! I could hear them off in the distance!
What a wonderfull way to bring across the tale of your words!
Great Job!

Story suggestion : Something that has to do with Peanut Butter and a piece of toast that was thrown from a twenty second story window! :)

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

really good, good imagry, but it lacks focus seemingly to take hold and thrash the reader around a bit trying to get the idea of what you were going with. but it is good the point in the end is clear and eats at the reader like snow melts into water to wash our heart ache away. start a fresh and begin anew. keep up the good work....