Lemonade

a lemony perspective on nature

Condensing sunlight

Pours like lightning bolts,

Or lemonade,

Whichever you prefer.

 

The sound of falling rain

Mocks the march of soldiers

Or of secrets told in whispers

Left unheard.

 

Is nature only a reflection

Of our actions?

Following the lead of human violence,

Human silence,

Human drinks like lemonade?

 

You’d think the opposite,

But don’t be blind.

We’re winning in this race

Against the ecosystem

And blindly it pays tribute.

 

While we sip our lemonade

And watch the rain,

Or bathe in sunlight pouring down

Like lightning bolts,

We feel at home.

 

And this is because

Nature mocks the human race

And bears the weight of human wars

And fills the cups of human lords

With lemonade.

 

Author's Note

social issues, nature, this is a mixture of several things and a random blurb of lemony goodness. enjoy!

Reviews

[Kaye]

That was really very amusing. I love how you have all these incredibly heavy ideas mixed in with light whimsical ideas. Very deep and very conversational in the style you wrote it in. I especially like it at the beginning when it's like you're speaking directly to each individual reader.
I think I liked the first three stanzas best because they were both dark, and then light at the same time. It seemed to get heavier in the last three stanzas. You might consider adding in one huge burst of light humor at the end, moreso than you have currently with the reoccurance of the lemonade, just to add some more bitterness and sarcasm to the whole poem. A burst at the end can cause the reader to think over the main idea of the poem deeper.
Beautiful beautiful beautiful poem.

[Erin Sky]

this is BRILLIANT! I love it when you take something simple, and it becomes the theme of something wonderful and complex, and yet...simple. ehe. Late night fo rme..

[Wolfwind Words]

This was really deep...My mind is steel racheting around on it. I like lemondade! Yet in this, i think it is a twist on the idea of poison, as we slowly kill our selves.
Great Write here!