So Cold

trials of youth

It’s so cold,

I can feel your teardrops freeze.

What’s old?

We’ll run till we can’t breathe.

There’s no use in fighting

The inevitable fate we choose.

The universe reverses roles

With those who lose

Their faith.

 

It’s so cold,

I can’t turn the page

Of this novel you have written.

Fate will choose her victim

But the pages they write

Have a role in her decision.

 

It’s so cold,

My heart is numb with guilt.

Relief? I know of no such thing.

The pain I feel wont cease

Till you warm up to me,

Stay young with me!

 

 

Author's Note

2nd posting, hurray for restoration!

Reviews

[Bailey]

I like the randomness!! Sometimes the only way to express feelings is to be random; sometimes your emotions are just too complex to make absolute sense of. This is a beautiful piece of writing! It makes me think of despair and that feeling that all hope is gone. Good job! :)

[Legacy]

Good Evening Sara,

Beautiful write. Just curious though... (I don't want to read the wrong thing into this) Is this of a woman who loves a man and that man is blind to it? Either/or beautiful write - love the words.

Thank you,

Legacy

[Murphy]

an arctic chill sends shivers straight through to the fingertips which can no longer turn the page... sure, this poem is a bit random, but it leaves the door open to many possibilities... could this cold front have originated in another heart that was numb with guilt?... does that make sense?... i really like the last two lines:
"Till you warm up to me,
Stay young with me!"
this plea is indispensable... the rest of the poem balances on these last two lines. nicely written; i like your style.

[Owlecks]

I don't think it's random. It feels like someone young is afraid of getting old and dying.

I like it though! a lot actually

[Alex Ferraro]

I connect most with the second stanza but this poem, in being a little erratic on subject might just offer a little something for everyone. Well done.

[Andromeda]

i think it makes perfect sense, though i'm not sure what it makes sense about...hehe, i really like it

[nokturnal]

Very well written and great flow a little random but still a great write