A Simple View

a quickie

A simple view is all I can give you

Into the deeper side of things

Swim across to me and ill try to catch you

But no one can give you your very own wings

 

The simple view is the most expensive

City skylines claim their price

But the chance to escape and to feel…worthwhile

That’s the truth that the view provides

 

Silently swimming the shark stalks the fish

But surprise lacks all warning to those who don’t flinch

The simple view of predator and prey

Is the basis of life and that way it will stay

 

A simple view is all I can see

The world will always be a mystery

But the simpler things like love and disease

Are the essence of humanity.

 

Author's Note

2nd posting, hurray for restoration!

Reviews

[Emily B]

This is great! Masterful use of the words.

[avant security guard]

If the Simple View is a quickie--you are fantastic--here's my comments--which are sort of a prejudice of mine--I'm very into the fact that a poet should be a protector of the English language--so, don't let Word capitalize the first word of each line on you--only capitalize the first word in a sentence--in the third line--you wrote ill--when you meant I'll--you can elevate yourself--you owe it to yourself--by using proper grammar, punctuation and spelling. A lot of poets don't bother, and the meaning gets lost. You have excellently repeated the phrase "simple view" in the first line of a few paragraphs--and just missed rhymes--super--you're great! An Emily D in the wings.

[Owlecks]

I like the rhyming in this. And I like the parts about the swimming. Would you try to catch me?

[Legion]

I prefer the simpler things myself. :)

[Andromeda]

omygosh, this one is incredible. sometimes i think that the best poems are the ones we think we don't put any effort into

[Carlee]

I love how you call 'love' simple when many say it's the most hard to understand thing in the world xD I like the line about city skylines and that no one can give you your wings.