Explainable Love In My Heart

I think the title says it all.

Here you are
Lighting up my life
Showing me
What true love really is
When you smile
Your dimples arise
And makes me wanna sing

The touch of your fingertips
Are never ending
The feeling of your warm heart
Gives to me is amazing
I never want to leave your arms

Hold me forever my love
Never let go of me
For I will show you the path
To my never aching heart
Filled with so much joy
I can't possibly explain it in words

You deserve nothing but the best
Your so sensational
I want you to be
My lover forever

Fall into my arms my friend,
I will catch you
For you are worth catching

I want to live
My whole life with you
No doubt involved

My sweet
Precious security
May you have good dreams
Every night of your life
And let the figment of me
Be with you
When I'm not near to hold you

REVISED VERSION:

Here you are
Lighting my life
Showing me
Love's paradise
Your smile,
Your dimples,
Makes my heart beguile

You're so sensational,
Filled with joy
Existing as your lover,
Birth you a boy
I'll hold you forever,
Not letting go
I will show you the path,
To my comforted soul

Never ending fingertips,
Warmed heart
I am convinced,
Till death do us part

Fall in my arms,
You, I will seize
Uniting charm,
Like dancing honeybees

Precious security,
Sweet dreams
Every night
Let the figment of me,
Be with you,
When I'm overseas

Author's Note

You fall in love by chance, but you stay in love by choice.

Reviews

[Amber Lily]

This was a delightful read. Truly everything you would ever wish and want with your lover is right here, in this very poem. I can feel the passion you have through this piece, and that I think is what makes it beautiful. Writing is passion, and passion can be writing. I believe you have both :)

And... OMG I JUST STARTED THE MAY TERM AT SNHU! ARE YOU IN MY CLASS!?!?!?!
I'm going for fiction writing :)

[Sara Lynn]

I haven't gone yet I have many family things to deal with first :(

[Amber Lily]

Aw that's understandable. You'll love it when you start, it's perfect for people with a busy schedule :)

[Michael Wright]

Honestly I thought the first draft was a bit better
How you are touching emotions deep down and expressing them quite well

[DayDreamerAmber]

Awww this is beautiful!! Makes my heart melt! Good job!

[DoormanDan]

You used some very lovely(pun very intended because I'm that one guy) words in this piece, and when added together with the well chosen color of the poem, it makes this very atmospheric and beautiful. Fantastic job! :)

[NanoGigabite]

Geez good job on the love thing

[Robert]

I like the revised version. A lovely piece with good expression from the heart.

[Joshua Clement]

I'm not well versed when it comes to love, But I think this was beautiful... and I love your note... it's giving me a lot to think about. Thank you for posting!