Ode to Daniel Radcliffe

i totally objectify guys.

Ode to Daniel Radcliffe

 

The heavens open when you speak

All fall before you, the mighty and the meek

Your skin of marble, your eyes of blue

The body of muscle and hot accent too

The night wolves will howl and the white doves will sing

On the day you present me with a fat diamond ring

I hope and I pray you'll see me some day

Daniel, oh Daniel, please come my way...

 

Author's Note

lol, and this is why i don't write in rhyme :D

Reviews

[zombiikillah666]

after the back and forth
comments on yours
and devons page, i just
had to see this for myself. :D
&&& i like it...
daniel........yummy.
thats one hot little boy...lol. :P

[Devons]

Nice rhyme. Gay poem.

[Shalini Dinesh]

daniel fan??? hmm nice poem indeed, if at all you meet him one day, read this to him....

[Augustus]

Its a cute poem Sara....Quite humorous too....Sounds perfectly like a teen's fascination.... "hot accent", "fat diamond ring" are crazy expressions! Jose Humilde is probably right about the last line...
The only thing I do not approve of in the poem is calling it an Ode...but maybe that's because I have seen many odes and associate a certain meaning with that verse form... But I guess you are free to define your brand of "Ode".... keep writing...

[Dan]

Carry on seeking him...we all know that Harry caught the seeker...

[José Humilde]

Very Nice...oh what I'd DO to Daniel Radcliffe and/or the dude that plays Hagrid.

haha, jk.

I very much enjoy this.

"All fall before you, the mighty and the meek"

Instead of a comma, I think a colon would be better? I think it would better describe who is encompassed in "all.'

For the most part, I like the flow...easy to ready, and follow (especially for a dummy like myself.)

I've read your last lines maybe 20 times already, and it sounds a little "weird." I think to fix this, you need an extra syllable?

example:
"Daniel, oh Daniel, please come fly my way..."

haha, IDK...just a thought.

Thanks for the great piece. :)

[just rose.]

I love this. Ah, idol worship, if only ...

very clever and well-rendered.

[B0Beauxs]

I love your rhyme! Believe me, you could pull any poem off (Even rhyming ones).

This is funnily-sweet, made me laugh. Nice poem :)

[faryn wolff]

Oh, my, that hot accent, indeed :)
haha, what a cute poem! And the rhyming was really good, too !

[J.M. Barrett]

Daniel Radcliffe likes women!? I'm just playing.

I thought this poem was adorable!
"our skin of marble, your eyes of blue
The body of muscle and hot accent too"

God know I love accents. So the "hot accent too" line made me laugh!