Sunrise

wake up, wake up

Sunrise

 

In the early morning

the slow awakening

peeks into her

consciousness

waiting for the starting

signal of a lazy yawn

and her smile.

 

Reviews

[Ed Hart]

you're about sweet, times six

[James Paulin]

I see you love beautiful sunrises too. I like your selection of gender and your personification.

[Robyn]

this is a lovely poem
i love the simplicity of it and the words you chose
great work with this

[Lucy Joan]

Indeed, the simplicity of this poem amazingly and creatively peaks a start at a potentially beautiful story. The cut of each lines seems to speak wonders, and the theme of peace and beginnng is expressed very eloquently in this poem. Great write!

[Augustus]

the slow awakening
peeks into her
consciousness

Brilliantly simple and simply brilliant! :)
It is a lovely write with no words wasted... In fact its brevity adds to its charm. You really know how to captivate your readers with a minimum of words...
great work!

[happy girl]

I love a beautiful sunrise....it's definatly something you can't miss when your at the carribean. Sorry, distracted. That was very beautiful, I loved the line "peeks into her conciousness". Very beautiful as always.

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... oh ... what a lovely lyric ... how utterly enchanting and beautiful ... and ... "signal of a lazy yawn" ... is an unforgettable expression ... sweet poetry ... :) ...

[Annette Jay Sweeney]

Very simply, but well put :).

[Devons]

I second that emotion.

The beautiful sun means nothing to me if I am not beautifully sunny myself..

[just rose.]

this is neat because it inverts the usual notion of the sun waking us up, it's sort of like the sun is waiting for the sleeper to validate her (i'm making the sun a girl here), which brings to mind the notion of if a sun rises in the forest and no one is awake to see it ... :)

... as always, precise details make the poem.