A New Open Door

Acrostic

Recline on the couch, relax on recliner

Entertain romantic thoughts; life couldn't be kinder

Cuddle up late in bed, snuggle on couch

You are my love, yield to you; stubble ouch

Comfy now late in life_ free from responsiblity

Love is deep; committment strong_capability

Enjoying life_fruit of eary struggles

Determined to fullfil our life together_not burst bubbles

 

True to you; constant in my thoughts

Envelope  you with what love has wrought

Easy is life_sleep late, stay up late

Now there is a new open door, my mate

Author's Note

As we get old we become reclycled teens..

Reviews

[Jenny Nelson]

Enjoyed reading this. Like the sense of the newness later down the road. Really appropriate line... the "new open door." A fun and pleasant read. Well done.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words bring about such hope for the freedom of love and life... that newness of being rediscovered as we grow... (Won't say "old"!)

[erik_nihil]

I enjoyed the ideas you chose to put emphasis on. I can relate to everything but the optimism -- my fault, not yours. However, i do like the optimism, even if i can't reach it on an intellectual level, because it's nice to pretend. Don't get me wrong, i'm not a pessimist, but the fact that i identified strongly with part of the poem only illuminated the contrast with the rest of it. To me, that's where i gained meaning from it, and perhaps everyone else in their own way, as well. If i were pressed to find fault in any area, i would say that even though the ideas were well-placed and chosen in such a way as to lead the reader clearly through the path of the poem, the struggle for rhyme is a bit forced and awkward in places, which acts as speed bumps along the road. Perhaps if you settled for close-rhymes that are better idea-words, or maybe lost the rhyme altogether (or simply ignore it in places and utilize it in others, according to your own emphases). Just an idea. Love your work so far, though. Mine is so much darker.

[Ladysue]

I just love your note...and has truth to it...I can feel that way...your poem has a playful flow with a great lines...

Determined to fullfil our life together_not burst bubbles...is a powerful statement

Much enjoyed this...good work...

[Moflo]

This was very nicely written, I thought. You had some great word play and it had a good flow with strong rhymes. Good write.