Under The Rose Trellis

Choka, the longest of Japanese Haiku type poem...

                             Running Pale Pink Rose

                       On the trellis grows_soft scent

                             Wafts on morning air

                   

                               Under rose trellis

                       You steal a kiss__Oh! Blissful

                            Lips that taste of rose

 

Author's Note

Choka, written in response to competition that said leave me breathless..

Reviews

[David Scott]

There is something special about a rose, a kiss, and a poem...
They are all rather "minuscule" in the grand scheme of things. Yet, they all have the power to change this world into a better place...
Much like you Sara as an author... Making the world a better place.
Lovely!

[Robin]

bubbly , bright , lovely

[Eagle Cruagh]

Dining on petals of the rose
The taste lingers
The aroma rises slowly, subtly
And you leave the reader breathless

------ Eagle Cruagh

[J.S. Pua]

I kind of like this simple write..
thank you for sharing..

[Cherrie Palmer]

your simple poem is a perfect picture in time

[blob blob]

wow--simply-magnificently beautiful!!!
i love this:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. Takes great talent to write a strong poem in so few words. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ladysue]

An exquisitely beautiful piece of writing... nicely done...

[Ed Hart]

here, within the glade
of trellised roses' shade
our first kiss was made

[just rose.]

anything to do with pink roses is a-ok with me. they're my favorite.

you invoke their heavenly sensuality here. lovely.

[aftervision]

the stealing of a kiss -- is just pure bliss -- lips the taste of a rose -- soft and ever so sweet my poet