Under The Rose Trellis

Choka, the longest of Japanese Haiku type poem...

                             Running Pale Pink Rose

                       On the trellis grows_soft scent

                             Wafts on morning air

                   

                               Under rose trellis

                       You steal a kiss__Oh! Blissful

                            Lips that taste of rose

 

Author's Note

Choka, written in response to competition that said leave me breathless..

Reviews

[David Scott]

There is something special about a rose, a kiss, and a poem...
They are all rather "minuscule" in the grand scheme of things. Yet, they all have the power to change this world into a better place...
Much like you Sara as an author... Making the world a better place.
Lovely!

[An owl on the moon]

What a wondrous form, and you give it such freedom. There is the beauty of this moment, and the sensual, soft kiss, sharing such a vibrant history of moments. Wondrous write!

[The Analog Kid]

I can smell the roses. Beautiful and sweet. Nice words choices.

[Abigail T]

Oh, goodness! What a sweet, light, fluffy piece! Makes me think of butterfly kisses on a spring morning. Lovely!

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Your tone is so endearing in this piece. Fills me with the thought of a tranquil romance. Beautifully conveyed.

[Desert Dreamer]

Wonderful description of a kiss under the fragrance of the roses.

[Talkativeted]

This is a lovely poem. The words paint a picture in my minds eye

[deeps]

This is so lovely!
Enjoyable read.

[Crowley]

mmmmm...that smelled and tasted wonderful. Great job.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

exquisite blush~ a gorgeous plush poetic that is pure balm and perfume for the spirit~

[Hellslastwarrior]

Nice description of the kiss that tastes like a rose, its the perfect way to describe the exsplosion of emotions one feels at the touch of their lips, in such a calm perfect way.
Ted