Under The Rose Trellis

Choka, the longest of Japanese Haiku type poem...

                             Running Pale Pink Rose

                       On the trellis grows_soft scent

                             Wafts on morning air

                   

                               Under rose trellis

                       You steal a kiss__Oh! Blissful

                            Lips that taste of rose

 

Author's Note

Choka, written in response to competition that said leave me breathless..

Reviews

[David Scott]

There is something special about a rose, a kiss, and a poem...
They are all rather "minuscule" in the grand scheme of things. Yet, they all have the power to change this world into a better place...
Much like you Sara as an author... Making the world a better place.
Lovely!

[Tate Morgan]

That was so sweet and the thought could be TASTED ON THE END OF MY TONGUE

[Geralyn Miller]

Nice! I love the vivid picture you paint with your well chosen words.

[Cassandra D.]

This was very lovely.
The ending was so unique and very amazing!

[emmajoy]

So much meant in so few words .. beautiful, serene, charming, memorable.

[Jasmine]

pretty and pink... so gentle and simple. inspired. :)

[Tommy]

You know I haven't written much in the form of Haiku or Senryu, but I enjoy the power that when written well they posses in such little diction. You have wrote a great verse full of passion and awe in the sight of love.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Adelia Alighieri]

Such a mesmerizing use of vocab, it doesn't fail to create a sensation. Wow, well done!

[ice]

"The miniscule is very important.." indeed
This poem shows the truth in your statement.
A joy of life compacted..but highly visual
in six short lines..
enjoyed

[Wolf's Dark Song]

This does sound very blissful and romantic. I give it an 100. I really enjoyed this beautiful poem!

[Dushyant Thadani]

Beautiful write. Just so picturesque. Nature is a beautiful topic and it also makes poetry beautiful.