On The Wings Of Dawn

Free Verse

There's dawn on the horizon

Breaking forth_please come with me

Let's jump on and ride away

Rise on these wings_wings of ease

 

Ride to heights above the stars

Blessing each one with new dawn

Full of color, full of warmth

Full of promise, happiness

 

Come again with me_ let's go

Another day let's ride on dawn

Over rocky mountain heights

Forest of trees, deserts, plains

 

Come, come with me let's ride dawn

See sleepy people yawn, grump

Children in front of tv

Early in the day alone

 

Come lets ride majestic dawn

Bringing each unclouded day

Color so exquisite ours

Early in the morning hours

 

Author's Note

Dawn and sunrise such a lovely time of day...

Reviews

[Charles]

Nice use of a flowing meter to carry the reader through the stanzas - really felt like riding dawn as i read through this poem. The stanzas seem almost too structured to be free verse, but are by definition, I guess. Again, that use of ___ to connect parts of lines. Good effect. Often times the repetition of a word at the onset of consecutive stanzas is distracting - not so in this case (with the word come). Perhaps, the internal repetition in the one stanza broke things up enough to help the reader identify with the plea to 'come with me. Good work.'

[Ruth]

Certainly is! A beautiful portray of that too! xx

[Anita B Jacques]

Beautiful, I love it, it's like fly away, your writing was an invitation to join you and ride away with you, very nice write.
Your last word "hours" about "dawn" It would feel better, my opinion of cause.

[Undying Glory]

wow this is really beautiful work, awesome. i wonder why no one's reviewed this earlier...anyway you've done a great job with this