Love Waits Near The Peach Orchard

Jueju but written for a contest which required 4 stanzas not just one stanza like it is supposed to be written.

She sits near the peach orchard

Waits to take love's calloused hand

Autumn's leaves are nearly gone

Winter's cold wind on life lands

Whispers in soft twilight glow

As snow on the mountains fall

Memories like rivers pass

As future's vision does stall

The seasons have had hard blows

Mixed in blessings from above

Memories comfort you so

While hand and hand, we still love

Silver strands in moonlight shines

Love now a great fulfilled dream

Through some storms and gentle snow

Love's true strength will always gleam

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

no matter what nature and the cosmos do, it seems your love will weather them all…..tho the seasons give their knock, it seems the relationship can internalize it quite well….a lovely piece with some struggles, in the end everything will be fine because strength shrouds them in deep hope…
warmly, B

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Thank you, Betty, for the understanding review of my work. I appreciate the time spent here reading and reviewing my work. Sara K

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Sara🌷
Warmly
B

[Betty Hermelee]

hand in hand as lovers do, they pursue a gentle path of memories and change of seasons, perhaps difficult to manage but their love still holds them together throughout all of them…a lovely visual, romantic piece
warmly, B

[Amy R]

This poem shows a romantic relationship, intertwined with the imagery of seasons, nature, and the passage of time, illustrating how love persists and evolves through various life stages.

Beautiful word choice used like "calloused," "whispers," "twilight," "silver strands," and "fulfilled dream" suggest both the wear and beauty of love over time. The diction is reflective and tender, emphasizing the emotional depth of the relationship.

Very magnificent write, I enjoyed this one .
-Amy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, this is intense....the imagery storms the page...love if it is true can withstand all the seasons.
It may have a calloused hand but it can reach out and grasp hard and fast.
j.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Thank you, Jacob, for the visit and leaving such a nice review of my work. I appreciate the time spent here. The poem is some of my thoughts about aging, growing apart and getting dementia. Sara K

[Mauricio Montoya]

Well I like the first stanza it reminded me when I work in the orchards mother nature I pick her trees rake her leaves endure the cold to reap her warmth come next spring. Love how all 5 come together, Thank you for sharing.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Thank you, Mauricio, I appreciate the nice review of my work. Yes, an orchard can give a person so much to enjoy as does life and also in an orchard one finds change, aging, and death of the trees. Sara K