Bittersweet You

Dreams about love and the sound of rain.

It's rainy again
And I can only think of you:
A bittersweet pain.
I think of your name
And hope you do feel the same;
Lost in a nightmare
All I want is to not care.

Author's Note

Feedback is welcome. :) Also, I really need help with titles lol

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your title...on this one...

and i like the battle within..and that hope that i can quit thinking about you...the plea to stop, get her out of my mind.

[Marcus Sergiu David]

Always nice reading your reviews, Jacob. Thanks for stopping by.

[Tessa Melendez]

It's a short poem, but it fits in a lot of emotion and thought. I agree with the title though, so I think you'll be fine with finding titles. I usually find the creation of titles difficult too and wait until the end of the piece to find a name for the piece. But, I find this a relatable piece too. I've had times where I have not wanted to care while in the midst of thinking of someone I wish would return my feelings. Great work. Keep it up.

[Marcus Sergiu David]

I'm glad that you liked it. Thanks for reviewing,

[alifeacoustic]

Bittersweet indeed. When relationships end, our brain overloads on memories, leaving us drowning in their wake. Great write. Solid words and flows effortlessly.

[Marcus Sergiu David]

Thanks for the nice words, alife.

[alifeacoustic]

You're welcome :)

[Revan Pronghorn]

Quite interesting. I think you should avoid writing really short poems because it seems to be the death of you. You could've really wrote a lot more about this "bittersweet pain" you feel/you've felt.

[Marcus Sergiu David]

I don't think that a short poem can't communicate a lot. But I agree, I could have expanded more on that idea. Thanks for the review.