Caught in the Conundrum

 

“Splash-h-h-h”

 

And her lashes- Unleashed…

Her feet on the turf of azure!

 

Flabbergasted- She was...

To see herself-

Intertwined in the tapestry…

 

Enthralled by the rays-

Of a day

Or,

Bewitched by the darkness-

Of a night…

 

Dilemma!

She- a mystifying pendulum!

 

All- she knew,

Was-

A word!

The Miracle!

 

 She-whirled-on a toe!

Her arms-stretched

Toppled- an ooze

Rippled- an enigma!

 

She was in love-

Madly,

With the stars-

and

With the butterflies!

 

For-she knew-

Night must vanish!

Or

Day must die!

 

For her-to be with

The delusion of the star

Or

The anonymity of a butterfly!

 

A chasm-

In between-

Grabbed her in-

And …

 

Now- She is-

Caught in the conundrum!

 

 

Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel “Hridayaninadini”

24th-Jan-2012-IISc-LHH-110-4:55 pm-India

Me-My bangles-red and black-dell-my thoughts-

A riddle!!!

 

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Reviews

[Livana Lowell]

Dear Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini",

Indeed, what nice use of diction to paint a picture. Actually I see a lot of devices used efficiently in this piece. You start off with the rarely used onomatopoeia, which is pretty cool to me. I never use it. The word flabbergasted is an extreme word. I suppose it does fit because the diction in this piece sure is strong, full of extreme connotations like "enthralled" and "bewitched." Anyways, I see that this is a mysteriously portrayed woman. I kind of wonder the purpose of the lines, "Dilemma/ a mystifying pendulum." Are you stating there is a problem and introducing the mysterious woman? I can feel her surprise in the stanza where it says, "All she knew...." Then the next stanza takes me into a love most familiar to me. You just got to love nature. Yet I love how you make it fleeting. For she knew the night would vanish. Her getting caught in the Conundrum is perhaps a symbol of her becoming one with nature, or getting so absorbed into something, you fall into a chaos. I am uncertain, but your word choice often turns out to be interesting.

Thanks for sharing.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Dear Livana,

I am inspired by the way you review my poem. Each word holds meaning, and I am glad that you are able to feel them. I wrote this poem, when I was trapped in do-or-die situation. For 'do' was adorable and so was the 'die'. I was intertwined. Entangled in the mystery. A puzzle. A riddle that can't be solved. Despite of me being strong, I was tantalized by the delusion of the amusement! I was not able to figure out.
Livana, I am really impressed the way you go through. You respect the feeling, that's the best part in you to be praise. I am indebted, again.
Thank you.
Stay blessed.

Sanjeeta :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

An interesting, imaginative descent into the murky.

[Birdman313]

enjoyed this poem

[Rene Velez]

nice imagery and at end confusion I hope that was the direction you were going, none the less excellent piece.

[Dushyant Thadani]

It is a wonderful poem... Really liked it :)

[roarke]

conundrums will catch you up.... I liked it through the seventh stanza, then I wasn't sure where it was going, hence the conundrum, I guess.
Your poetry is well written.

[Dayran]

A mystifying pendulum may someday stop to inquire of itself. No doubt it faces quite a riddle, but, is itself quite a match for it. Nice write!