Caught in the Conundrum

 

“Splash-h-h-h”

 

And her lashes- Unleashed…

Her feet on the turf of azure!

 

Flabbergasted- She was...

To see herself-

Intertwined in the tapestry…

 

Enthralled by the rays-

Of a day

Or,

Bewitched by the darkness-

Of a night…

 

Dilemma!

She- a mystifying pendulum!

 

All- she knew,

Was-

A word!

The Miracle!

 

 She-whirled-on a toe!

Her arms-stretched

Toppled- an ooze

Rippled- an enigma!

 

She was in love-

Madly,

With the stars-

and

With the butterflies!

 

For-she knew-

Night must vanish!

Or

Day must die!

 

For her-to be with

The delusion of the star

Or

The anonymity of a butterfly!

 

A chasm-

In between-

Grabbed her in-

And …

 

Now- She is-

Caught in the conundrum!

 

 

Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel “Hridayaninadini”

24th-Jan-2012-IISc-LHH-110-4:55 pm-India

Me-My bangles-red and black-dell-my thoughts-

A riddle!!!

 

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Reviews

[Livana Lowell]

Dear Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini",

Indeed, what nice use of diction to paint a picture. Actually I see a lot of devices used efficiently in this piece. You start off with the rarely used onomatopoeia, which is pretty cool to me. I never use it. The word flabbergasted is an extreme word. I suppose it does fit because the diction in this piece sure is strong, full of extreme connotations like "enthralled" and "bewitched." Anyways, I see that this is a mysteriously portrayed woman. I kind of wonder the purpose of the lines, "Dilemma/ a mystifying pendulum." Are you stating there is a problem and introducing the mysterious woman? I can feel her surprise in the stanza where it says, "All she knew...." Then the next stanza takes me into a love most familiar to me. You just got to love nature. Yet I love how you make it fleeting. For she knew the night would vanish. Her getting caught in the Conundrum is perhaps a symbol of her becoming one with nature, or getting so absorbed into something, you fall into a chaos. I am uncertain, but your word choice often turns out to be interesting.

Thanks for sharing.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Dear Livana,

I am inspired by the way you review my poem. Each word holds meaning, and I am glad that you are able to feel them. I wrote this poem, when I was trapped in do-or-die situation. For 'do' was adorable and so was the 'die'. I was intertwined. Entangled in the mystery. A puzzle. A riddle that can't be solved. Despite of me being strong, I was tantalized by the delusion of the amusement! I was not able to figure out.
Livana, I am really impressed the way you go through. You respect the feeling, that's the best part in you to be praise. I am indebted, again.
Thank you.
Stay blessed.

Sanjeeta :)

[Amila Jay]

WOW!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing poetry. I'm a great fan of myth. This took me to a good location with nature and beauty to excite the mind and heart. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lily Mae]

I felt as though I was in her shoes as you wrote this.. Your description was so vivid and clear. A journey inside the cocoon of self.. nice write..xo

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

beautiful imagery and nice use of powerful words loved the flow amazing work Sanjeeta

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

beautiful imagery and nice use of powerful words loved the flow amazing work sanjeeta

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Read it earlier..re-read it again... re-freshened me Rejuvenated thereof...:)

[TheSweet]

Brilliantly expressed poem. Something really draws me to ' She-whirled-on a toe! Her arms-stretched Toppled- an ooze Rippled- an enigma!' - Not even sure why. Very much enjoyed this, thanks a plenty :)

[Mary C]

a poignant write so well expressed....