A Weathered Heart!

Dazzled!

She never went!

For what she felt…

 

Fragrance! 

& 

Foulness!

 

Yeah she agreed-

They can feel the same

For, she knew

Everyone does have a “heart”!

 

But-

She had one!

That’s too weathered!

 

Lost in the labyrinth

Of thoughts!

She gripped a thread

That guided her…

 

A thread of hope!

 

She sighed-

That day was different

As she saw the "Dark" Sun- 

Yon on the sky-

 

 

Scared- She was!

He blessed her- 

the 'heart' of stone-

There she stands hard and calcified

 

Yeah...

 

Every-time she agreed

for the delusion, she had-

from-

the bygones and the reminiscences...

 

Unleashed!

Today

Her "heart” felt 

the buoyancy of a fur...

 

She learnt-

This way- the rules of life!

To win over the thoughts’ strife

Now-

She is not what she was!

 

Rocks weathers

To the pebbles-

Rolls down and here

The magnanimous mud!

Mixed with the rains of tear!

 

A weathered heart!

 

Resist!

The bolts from the blue unknown

The dearth of love

The downpour!

 

Despite!

A divine light guided her...

and her weathered heart!

 

Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"

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Entangled in the thoughts!

Reviews

[Livana Lowell]

Dear Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini",

Sounds like a woman on a journey and every stanza takes us to those moments in her life weathering, but also of strengthening. At the beginning stanza, I am introduced to the character of this poem. The diction words "fragrance" and "foulness" make me think about how life is full of sweet smells and corruption. Although, I'm not sure who "they" in the third stanza you are referring to. Did you mean that fragrance and foulness can feel the same or are you talking to the audience as if to establish a connection.

When I think of weathering, I think of rocks being chiseled under rain, floods, and winds, so this heart must have endured a lot. The stanza that starts with, "she sighed..." that makes me picture a day of redemption and that God is guiding her weathered heart.

Actually, I not only feel like I am introduced to a woman's heart, but her mind as well as you mention overcoming "thoughts." The word "despite" in the last stanza puzzles me. I would think a word like "behold," or "Besides," but that's just me.

Nice read. Thanks for sharing.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Dear Livana,

Thank you for your honest review. I am indebted. "They" here represents the society. I used "Despite" to show that despite of all bitterness she went through, a divine light guided her. I am really glad that you went through each words and try to feel them. It inspired me. Thank you so much.

Stay blessed,
Sanjeeta

[K.C. Zbryk]

I loved the uplifting end to the piece. It leaves the reader feeling inspired and uplifted towards the end. Many people could learn something from this piece. I also loved the vsarious ways that you described a heart and i thought this gave the piece a very unique feel. Wonderful job!

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thanks KC :)

[Amila Jay]

Lost in the labyrinth
Of thoughts!
She gripped a thread
That guided her

Brilliant poem:-)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Teriffic poem...
shows the value of moving on...
great :)

[Lily Mae]

I love the way you took the pain and hurt on it's own journey into the hope and light of day...which is the truth in all things.. We sometimes sit too long in the lessons on the darker side of suffering and this shows the reward of moving on.. :)