If I was the Line___________,

Sunday, March 13, 2011

If I was the Line_____,

Dedicate this poem to "my lines"..that guides me..

Mitrapark, Chabahil, Time: 11:10 pm

Sunday, Me [listening to the songs of Sugam Pokharel]

and my brain and heart lost in the lines...

If I was the line_____,

Straight it goes,

To the crowded city and the dusty place,

The columns and the rows,

The longer..the stiff..the race,

If I was the Line_____,

I would be the vertex between,

Something nobler and something fine,

something beyond loosing and to win,

If I was the line____,

I would have painted a smile,

destroying the borders that prevents,

us from being closer; the walls of those miles,

If I was the line____,

I would have gone to the hamlet,

where happiness persists and the love,

that glares the eyes of those who hate,

The clouds, The rains and the dove,

If I was the line_____,

I would have enter into "your" heart,

and connect "you" with the endearment,

of something serene...passionate...the ART,

Beholding from your pearly casement,

If I was the line_____,

Here I join the sky and the earth,

the death and the birth,

the tears and the smile,

the ocean and the Nile,

the Peace and the harmony,

the truth and the phony,

Finally,

You [ The world] and [Humanity] Me.

Fantasized by

Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"

Posted by Sanjeeta sharma pokharel "Hridayaninadini' at 10:21 AM

Reviews

[Skateprincess]

This was a powerful piece and simple yet complex. Very good

[Brad]

really, this bombarded the inner senses like an antibiotic for the soul

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

A visual display of beautiful and powerful words.

[Lily Mae]

I absolutely love this. Your poem is honest and raw... I love the way you used the line concept of the line:) xx Great write...x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Strong wording and deviant attitude, a reality not forgiven or unseen a truly mastered piece, well done.

[Katannaism]

A very raw, strong piece that really held onto their meanings and whatnot. This also juxtaposes the emotions well and efficiently. However, you overdid the ellipses a little. Just litter it around on the tails of a few sentences. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. Strong words and artwork made the poem a pleasure to read and grasped. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[HopelesslyDevoted]

brilliant!