What a pleasant surprise to find a fellow 'IISc'an here. :)
This is a succinct, poignant write with lovely imagery. I loved the phrase "Drenches this dried out memories" ('this' should be changed to 'these' for grammatical correctness). And also the concept of winds and butterflies not pampering you is very evocative. You're telling us that even the great beauty of nature that surrounds you cannot cure your homesickness. Well penned! :)
Thank you for your comment and correction. And thanks for pointing out the error. I, generally, writ.. read moreThank you for your comment and correction. And thanks for pointing out the error. I, generally, write poems directly as a post, so I accept the fact that there are many typographical-grammatical-technical errors. And for the later part of winds-butterflies-evocative message-great beauty of nature-and-cure is the core part of this poem. Human nature is diverse and for a single truth, they can come up with many definitions...So, I wonder...
I am honored.
This may be the best poem I have read this year...and also the most poignant ! Makes me hold back tears...I would say 'brilliantly penned'..but that may not be enough ! a 100 from me !
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Arabdha...things are different now....and hope you got the points...Bereaved!
What a pleasant surprise to find a fellow 'IISc'an here. :)
This is a succinct, poignant write with lovely imagery. I loved the phrase "Drenches this dried out memories" ('this' should be changed to 'these' for grammatical correctness). And also the concept of winds and butterflies not pampering you is very evocative. You're telling us that even the great beauty of nature that surrounds you cannot cure your homesickness. Well penned! :)
Thank you for your comment and correction. And thanks for pointing out the error. I, generally, writ.. read moreThank you for your comment and correction. And thanks for pointing out the error. I, generally, write poems directly as a post, so I accept the fact that there are many typographical-grammatical-technical errors. And for the later part of winds-butterflies-evocative message-great beauty of nature-and-cure is the core part of this poem. Human nature is diverse and for a single truth, they can come up with many definitions...So, I wonder...
I am honored.
This poems exhibits that sense of perception that, when used judiciously, reveals a greater understanding that has occurred in the mind of the poet. Sorry, too many "that"s ... but that's the way it goes. Nice poem, S.
P.S. "Home is where the heart is!" ~ Dorothy in The Wizard of Oz.
When we are so much hankered on a certain passion the slightest sound or tune seems to have it spoken to us even by birds and the wind. I experienced that one time and wondered about the possibilities of a one language all the people in the world could share. Certainly it would be a time when we want it badly enough. Great write.
"When words are stiff and hard to evoke out; they shape themselves as a poem [that last forever] " -Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"
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