Yes, I hate 'him'!"

 

‘He’ brought me,

The flowers-

Where no fragrance

Remained!

I praised ‘him’ for his efforts,

And said

“Why these papers,

Looks like

The flower-in-vain! ”

‘He’ took me to

The place-

Where no grasses

Were touched!(by the beam of light)

I admired the obscurity,

And said

“Why can’t you fetch in

That tiny Sun,

In your mighty-wallet!”

‘He’ showed me up,
to ‘his’ ceiling-
The majestic bunch light
hanging dead!
I smiled, mockingly
and said
“why don't you allow-in
the brilliance of
millions of fireflies"

For ‘his’ every labor,

I tried finding- Zilch!

For ‘he’ knew, by now-

That

Yes, I hate ‘him’!

Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel “Hridayaninadini”

25^th-July-2012-CES-IISc-12.30pm

Infected eyes-Infected thoughts-

Materialism [He] Vs. Spiritualism [I]

Posted by Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"

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Reviews

[Sid]

I'm not entirely sure about this poem, but somehow I get the feeling it's about shunning the materialistic nature of love and instead embracing the God given beauty. Just my thought, but it is definitely an intriguing write and well expressed. Maybe I should read the other comments in case you have explained it, but I think I'd prefer you views...very interesting write!!

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Sid,
Every one is gifted with their own way of perceiving things. So you did. If I say-Red, it might be a color for some, violence for some other and a rose for few. So is my poem. I appreciate that you some how caught hold of the theme. I was frustrated viewing the World around me- what matters to them- is 'material'...They find beauty in discounts and sales. You go and smile to a stranger- he will give a damn! We have almost forgotten that we are His creation...
At the end of the poem, I have mentioned what He and I in this poem connotes...
Thank you for going through my fantasy...

[Sid]

Yeah, but you can't deny that materialistic desires are relevant in this world though I agree it can be a pain when all people think about is "material", we should take some time to look at real beauty. And your fantasy was worth dwelling into, so you are welcome!

[Astro MacGuffin]

Sanjeeta,

I'm going to be honest and say I don't really get this poem. Like Tate Morgan said, I have a vague sense that you are speaking about some deity. I also get some vague sense of what you are saying to him, but I have less sense about what you are saying these things in response to.

What I do get very clearly is the frustration and incredulity you seem to have just reached, at the inception of this poem. I'm going to rate this poem a 60, because of my difficulty understanding it, but you won points for building a dialogue and narrative which travel considerably and convey mood effectively over the span of so few words.

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Nathan,

I am glad for the review and the rate I got. Thank you. I agree on your point of you not getting the core theme. Since, this poem entirely talks about
the materialistic world where reside a thought which hate every efforts of materialism...Yeah, the word 'frustration' actually fits the jigsaw-puzzle.
Any way, my regards to you for you meandered on my perplexing-thoughts...
Gracias.

[Astro MacGuffin]

No problem, and I should mention, less critically, I did enjoy the puzzle. The poem evoked vague, but strong sensations. Feel free to send me a read request next time you revisit this theme.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting journey you took me on. Sometime hard to see beauty with eyes of sadness and disappointment. The poem open the door to thoughts and questions. I like the complete poem. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

I find your review inspiring for you always seek inspirations from them. Thank you.

[Tate Morgan]

i assume this to be about god.A loss and remorse

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Your assumption do fits in. Thank you :)

[Lily Mae]

Such deep emptiness is felt in the heart while reading this.. you again ...and like always have penned the emotions well..xo

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Thank you. All your reviews adds a brick in this wall of inspiration.

[Dayran]

Quite often we create the realization of what a person is in our lives by relating that to our need for companionship. What he may bring, took or show is an exercise of that companionship. But I guess you know that by now.

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

True said, Dayran. Thanks :)

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

We hate those we love and love those we hate, brilliant poem. (I'm back ; ) )

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

Welcome back Chris. And, I appreciate the way you summarized the poem. Thank you :)

[MOON]

This is poignant , the need for something more than the material , the spiritual transcends . You conveyed this so well cutting in a way but most effective.

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

I am indebted, thank you Moon :)

[Jibey]

A crushing reflection of the feelings of a woman crushed by disappointment

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokharel "Hridayaninadini"]

You caught the point, I am happy :) Thank you Jibey :)