My Love...

Another poetry on love...

Look into my eyes,
what do you see?
You'll find love,
deeper than the sea...
You'll be drowned in it,
feeling a wild glee.
You've been searching for love,
follow your heart, it's me...

 

Listen to my voice, 
the song I'm about to sing.
It's incomplete without you,
sounds magical on my six strings...
My voice will shake your heart,
you'll feel the Cupid's sting.
you'll fall for me my dear,
and will fly without any wings...

 

Just look at me,
try to listen to my song.
You'll be spellbound,
with the love so strong...
Have no fear, my dear,
there's nothing wrong.
We'll be together forever,
in the romance, lifelong...

Author's Note

Kindly review it...
Special thanks to Dale for helping me improve it...:)

Reviews

[Blue]

"You'll be spell bound,
with the love so strong...
Have no fear my dear,
there's nothing wrong."

Perhaps you may want to apply the following corrections? :)
-spellbound
-Have no fear, my dear

I'm looking forward to reading more of your poems!

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Blue. I'll make the changes ASAP...:)

[Blue]

You are welcome!

[AYVID N]

The poem has a lovely musical quality to it and I really appreciate the uplifting quality of the words encouraging a beloved to let go of their fears and take the plunge. In the end, it's all about faith. Much appreciated Sanjh.

Dale is an awesome poet and a wonderful friend to have and to cherish. I too am greatly inspired by him. You are lucky.

[Sanjh]

Thank you for appreciating Divya, and in fact Dale (Confuser) is an awesome poet and reviewer but Dale is "her" not "him"...:p

[AYVID N]

Awww...sorry I have a great friend here and I thought it was 'him' :) I am sure she is awesome too.

You are welcome Sanjh. Reading the poem was my pleasure.

[Sanjh]

No need for sorry, it happens...:)

[Ana B.]

a very romantic write...i bet it is a very beautiful song :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Ana...:)

[Ruth]

Lovely...sentimental hopes and wishes, the heart displayed in vibrant tones :) xo

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much for reading Ruth, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[Khyati]

^_^ I WISH MY FUTURE HUSBAND SINGS IT TO ME ^_^

[Sanjh]

Lol, Think about your exams first...:p

[Khyati]

-_- :P they are over! ;)

[Sanjh]

over..??? so now holidays?

[Khyati]

:P no... tuitions

[Sanjh]

Holidays with tuition na?

[Khyati]

NO holidays :'(

[Sanjh]

Why??????????????????????????

[Khyati]

:P They were UT exam..

[Sanjh]

oooooooooooooooh, Unit Test...? 7 yrs ho gye na, tavi bhul gya tha...:p

[Khyati]

:P ;) NEVER MIND. Maine yaad dila diya. See, I am soo useful ;)

[Sanjh]

heheheh, haan...:)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Beautifully imagery painted in the readers minds. :-)

Kaze~

[Sanjh]

Thank you for appreciating Kaze...:)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

A lifelong romance drifting on a song, beautiful image, Sanjh. :) Rudi

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Rudi...:)

[The Black Warrior]

This is beautiful...such a sweet poem! I loved the description LOL :D

Well done!

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Suk, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[The Black Warrior]

You're very welcome! ;)

[stars are far]

aww that was so nice, i loved the love embodied their, well done :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Suhad...:)

[Confuser]

I always enjoy your love songs Sanjh. First stanza, so sweet; just thinking aloud, what do you see: all my hope, or longing or dreams; deeper than the sea....(last line is follow you're heart it's me). I still like it very much, however. The second stanza: Do you need the And? or could it be just Sounds? Do you need Yeah,?, I just playing here so please don't take offense. My voice will shake your heart, how nice and all the way through to any wings. Is it spell Bound or bounded? Thought about Embrace cupids sting? But I do like the way you have it too. Listen to my voice, the song I'm singing, I have fallen completely, Sounds beautiful (magical) on (my?) six strings, (for) you have bewitched me, Can you hear? Then: You'll fall for me my dear, ....I maybe shouldn't have written anything. I like it truly, the my & bounded and yeah, maybe that would work. Anyway, I look forward to hearing your lovely poems of love. thank you.

[Laura Lynn]

I do too, I feel loved, very much! Confuser is right on,

[Confuser]

I worried about this; writing anything. I still like like it. Hope I didn't overstep, thank you LL. Dale

[Sanjh]

Wow, thank you so much for so many valuable inputs Dale. And you have not overstepped, actually it looks better now. I've made some changes in first and second stanza, "and", "yeah" were really not needed there. I wrote it as a poem but now I've ideas for completing it as a song, all thanks to your inputs. I'm working on the chorus and tone right now, will soon update it.

Thank you so much Dale, your ideas are always welcome and I'll use all the lines suggested by you in my song...thank you once again...:)

[Confuser]

So thankful. I really did worry. It was so lovely, I thought, "Who am I to ask for a change.? So silly because you write such lovely love stories/poems/songs and I cannot. I think, the word, bewitched, I read in a poem of yours. Anyway, Thank you, I do feel better now, and want to re-read it. Let me know, please.

[Sanjh]

Sure Dale, I'll let you know as soon as I've completed it and your suggestions are always welcome. Do not ever think that you are crossing a line or anything.
Thank you so much...:)

[Confuser]

Sanjh, I thought, what a nice respectful young man. I was so impressed. I am much older, but not so experienced. Thank you very much. I do love your writing.

[Sanjh]

Thank you once again Dale...:)

[Shitsune Hyuuga]

Romantic and sweet. You can put music on it and BAM! you have a perfect love song.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Shitsune, may be someday I'll try it with music...:)