I Promise...

A promise to keep.

I'll be here,
I promised...

When you left me,
on this lonely path.
Left with just darkness,
And love's deadly wraith...

I tried to turn around and return,
from where I once started.
Kept running in the dark,
everyone thought I'm retarded...

I'll be here,
I promised...

I tried to free myself,
from each and every thought of you.
But the more I thought,
the deeper my love grew...

I cried, I shouted,
Thinking you might hear.
But no one ever heard me,
I lived in shadows of my tears...

I'm still here,
as I promised...

I'm still waiting for you,
from where you left long ago...
But you might not recognize me,
for who am i now? Even I don't know...

But I'm still here,
everyday my love still grows.
You are far away from me,
And I just want you to know:

I'll always be here,

I promise once more...

Author's Note

Help me improve it...thank you...:)

Reviews

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I don't think it needs anymore improvement ..it's already so amazing that it made me teary nd after every stanza when u said " i will be here ,i promised " .. it just made me stop and stare for few minutes ... very beautifull , totally a piece of brilliance.. :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and it touched you...:)

[blackfairy3]

Your welcome :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Can someone remain there always? This question arise in my mind, I have not seen such thing in life, but read a lot about these things,
A nice read

[Sanjh]

yes, that's a big question. Do "forever" really exist?
Thank you for reading...:)

[Luna Zerimar]

You know, you poem angered me.

'Cause we have people, stupid people who take good people for granted.

Good people as in people who give them all their love.

Good poem. Could use a little more spix.

[Sanjh]

Yeah Jessica, their are people who don't understand others and sometimes the situations don't let them understand. thank you for the suggestion...:)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

No need to improve this poem, Sanjh. It reads fluently, the repetition of the promise is emphasizing the message. No, it's a good love poem. I hope she has heard you. :) Rudi

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Rudi...:)

[Laura Lynn]

yeah, I feel that too but I want the love to come to get me, then I will know they truly want me! ;)

[Sanjh]

Well said Laura, very true. Thank you for reading...:)