I Promise...

A promise to keep.

I'll be here,
I promised...

When you left me,
on this lonely path.
Left with just darkness,
And love's deadly wraith...

I tried to turn around and return,
from where I once started.
Kept running in the dark,
everyone thought I'm retarded...

I'll be here,
I promised...

I tried to free myself,
from each and every thought of you.
But the more I thought,
the deeper my love grew...

I cried, I shouted,
Thinking you might hear.
But no one ever heard me,
I lived in shadows of my tears...

I'm still here,
as I promised...

I'm still waiting for you,
from where you left long ago...
But you might not recognize me,
for who am i now? Even I don't know...

But I'm still here,
everyday my love still grows.
You are far away from me,
And I just want you to know:

I'll always be here,

I promise once more...

Author's Note

Help me improve it...thank you...:)

Reviews

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I don't think it needs anymore improvement ..it's already so amazing that it made me teary nd after every stanza when u said " i will be here ,i promised " .. it just made me stop and stare for few minutes ... very beautifull , totally a piece of brilliance.. :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and it touched you...:)

[blackfairy3]

Your welcome :)

[Daisy]

It's complete by my opinion... doesn't need to be improved... very well done

[Sanjh]

Thanks Daisy...:)

[Natalie]

Wow, this is really amazing, and really struck a chord within me. Really great piece of writing, thank you so much for sharing!

[Sanjh]

Thank you Natalie...:)

[Kristen Angelic]

Truly beautiful :) no improvement at all

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Kristen...:)

[anne]

its filled with true emotions..beautiful work..:)

[Sanjh]

Thanks Shivedita, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[blackfairy3]

You have such a beautiful way with words

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much...:)

[Penny]

Indeed to wait for your loved one, to wait to feel loved is a really painful feeling. You never know, if he will return or does he even love you but you still wanna be there for him, by his side, waiting to return his love. Yes, as if keeping a said or unsaid promise. Very nicely depicted and emotional piece.

[Sanjh]

You're right Penny, we never know that the person we are waiting for will ever return or is he/she even thinking about you or not.
Thank you so much for the kind words...:)

[Penny]

It Has been my pleasure..

[Lexystar]

I don't see a reason to improve this. The poem is really well written. You did really well.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Lexy...:)

[Misha]

No need to improve...its amazing

[Sanjh]

Thank you Misha, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[Ana B.]

it reminds me of the song ''The man who can't be moved'' by The Script. I loved your poem, it has a big note of love but most of all - devotion

[Sanjh]

I just read the lyrics of the song ''The man who can't be moved'', it's beautiful and very close to what I've written.
thank you so much Ana...:)

[Ana B.]

you're welcome :)