The pit of death

Another sad poetry on life and death...

I've been waiting,
Inside this dark deadly pit,
For the reaper to take me,
From this life, I want to quit...

No one has been here in ages,
No, not even the light.
It's dark as the burned corpses,
A life long, never ending night...

I shouted many times,
Till my throat got choked.
But no one ever heard my voice,
Just opposite of what I hoped...

I tried to climb up the pit,
Every once in a while.
But I never made it out,
The walls made so vile...

I want to see the sunshine,
Want to feel it's warmth...
All I see here is death,
And it's evil wraith...

Waiting for my judgement day,
I want to feel alive.
I've been here forever,
But there's no hope to survive...

Author's Note

Your views please...

Reviews

[Shitsune Hyuuga]

Sadness and pain, it breaks the heart. I feel the persona's very pessimistic though sometimes this really shouldn't be our view but many of the people around always are like this. We can't help it all around us there's the symptoms of the "mean-world-syndrome"

[Sanjh]

Yes there are people like this or just the state of mind. Thank you so much for reading Shisune..:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

well written......
yes we are all in our respective pits of death!!
nice perspective!
fantastic poem!!!
i liked it!!!
:)

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much for the kind words...:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome...............:) :)

[Yours Truly]

You can feel the anguish and torment well in your poem. People can relate to feeling stuck in a place like this. Your description is very good telling it from being inside a pit, it's make it easily imaginable and flows so well, very beautifully written. Enjoyed reading, hope to see more. :)
-Yours Truly

[Sanjh]

I'm glad you liked it so much. And I'll try my best...:)

[Nikki]

I liked the flow of this poem. It had a very free and easy feel. :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you liked it...:)