The joke's on me...

A thought from the past.

They are laughing,
Fussing in other's ear.
Full of life,
But they are not clear...

All eyes on me,
I'm trying to be sincere.
Why are they laughing?
It's still unclear...

 

I can hear their voice,
Maybe they are telling some joke.
I've a bad feeling,
and I want them to revoke...
Anywhere I go,
I can hear them stroke.
I'm sensing fear,
But all I see is smoke...

 

Then suddenly I realised,
It's neither him nor she.
It's my ugly past,
That's laughing at me...
Sharp as hell,
Stinging like a bee.
My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me...

Author's Note

Wrote it in 2006, not very powerful, still sharing. Hope it'll work. Kindly review it...

Reviews

[Moonlight]

This composition is very well written. It totally highlights the confusion in the victim's mind in the beginning, the mocking gaze of his fellow acquaintances, and in the end the final realisation.
I like this part the most: " My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me..." and also
"I'm sensing fear,
But all I see is smoke.."
Amazing job! Keep writing.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Shivangi...:)

[M.A.Rathore]

Wonderful poem with good message that we our past laugh at on us. I love the last stanza like ...

Then suddenly I realised,
It's neither him nor she.
It's my ugly past,
That's laughing at me...
Sharp as hell,
Stinging like a bee.
My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me..

Fine imagery and compact wordings..
Keep writing...
Have a nice time. Do read and review some of mine.

[Cerise]

A wonderful poem...i am glad i got to read...its short with a lot of emotions and feelings...truly i loved it...specially the end...i am sure many have had those days wher the joke is upon us...

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[stars are far]

that was very well done, you did a great jobhere... keep it up :D

[Sanjh]

I'm glad you liked it, Thank you so much...:)

[The Black Warrior]

Wow this is good! Really good. It is very profound and eloquent. Beautifully done Sanjh.

I truly love this one :D

note:

May be (maybe) they are telling some joke.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Suk for reading and the correction...:)

[SoulWriter]

I think everyone had such a moment in life.
Really good!

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good.
Then suddenly I realised,
"It's neither him nor she.
It's my ugly past,
That's laughing at me...
Sharp as hell,
Stinging like a bee.
My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me.."
Hard to awake and find out. You are the butt of a joke. Funny how we learn that every action had a payment. The above lines could stand alone. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Coyote, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Laura Lynn]

There should be something wrong with this, but I find nothing for how can there be any wrong. Yet it is enough and not enough for you must keep calm and carry on with this great 'joke' which is nothing short of mountains, forests, and continents. There are a thousand treasures buried beneath the great mountains of Kilamanjaro and Blue Ridge, also the Andes. If any joke is played, it must be for love and good measure or, (for a woman,) to push you across the English Channel, else for fairness and temperate moderation between the nations of visitors.

[wesleygirl]

I thought it was quite powerful as well, I'm not a huge poem person but I quite like it, keep it up, you have a gift.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much, these sure are big words of appreciation for me...:)

[Jen]

Good ironic poem. I'm short of words *Clap Clap*
Liked these lines:-"It's my ugly past,
That's laughing at me...
Sharp as hell,
Stinging like a bee.
My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me..."
Keep it up!

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much once again...I'll try my best...:)

[Nikki]

I agree, don't sell yourself short. I think it says what you wanted to convey very well :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you once again Nikki...:)