The joke's on me...

A thought from the past.

They are laughing,
Fussing in other's ear.
Full of life,
But they are not clear...

All eyes on me,
I'm trying to be sincere.
Why are they laughing?
It's still unclear...

 

I can hear their voice,
Maybe they are telling some joke.
I've a bad feeling,
and I want them to revoke...
Anywhere I go,
I can hear them stroke.
I'm sensing fear,
But all I see is smoke...

 

Then suddenly I realised,
It's neither him nor she.
It's my ugly past,
That's laughing at me...
Sharp as hell,
Stinging like a bee.
My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me...

Author's Note

Wrote it in 2006, not very powerful, still sharing. Hope it'll work. Kindly review it...

Reviews

[Moonlight]

This composition is very well written. It totally highlights the confusion in the victim's mind in the beginning, the mocking gaze of his fellow acquaintances, and in the end the final realisation.
I like this part the most: " My past is laughing,
And the joke's on me..." and also
"I'm sensing fear,
But all I see is smoke.."
Amazing job! Keep writing.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Shivangi...:)

[Lyndy]

Beautiful poem, I like it very much! :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you Lyndy. :)

[Hailey noice]

This is a poam About people's past and what had happened is what made them sad. This poam is saying that someone had a past event that is haunting them and they can't let it go. Great poam.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Hailey. :)

[Daisy]

wonderful concept... really appreciable

[Sanjh]

Thank you Daisy. :)

[rashu]

very well written.. no it's powerful and really it expresses feeling that every individual faces..
i liked ur work and it appealed to me on differennt level
kkeep it up:)

[Sanjh]

Thank you Rashu...:)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

It's a very clever to piece, pretty creative with the past. The has a way of trying to catch up to those who try to out ran it. But when it catches up to them, it hits them like a ton of bricks. Nicely penned poem.

Kaze~

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Kaze. It really hurts when your past comes back to haunt you, but all we can do it is to go for a better future...:)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. And it's so true it really does hurt when it catches up to you. But all you can do is take a deep breath and keep on going. :-)

[Mazie]

I really like this one. :) it's well written, (maybe should only be one word is my only critique that I noted). I think you did a great job :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you for the correction Mel, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[Luna Zerimar]

Very emotional.

I can relate. x

[Sanjh]

Thank you Jessica, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[LadyNaida]

The past is something that always tries to come back and bring us down. As we go through life we learn from our past mistakes which makes our future brighter.

[Sanjh]

True LadyNaida, we learn with experiences and try not to repeat the mistakes. That's how life goes on...
Thank you so much...:)

[Abhishekizy]

Nice jumble of words there!! Best thing about it is that it actually stays in sync with the central thought and doesn't drift around. Nice rhyme here...good work!

[Sanjh]

Thank you Abhishek...:)