This makes a great set of lyrics! I'd love to hear is set to music, maybe something with acoustic guitar.
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"Getting" you sounds possessive or vindictive to me. Just a couple of suggestions: "Just getting you is," Maybe "Just holding you is" or "Just gaining your love is"
Yeah these are the lyrics, I can sing it, but I am not good with guitar, just a beginner. But will s.. read moreYeah these are the lyrics, I can sing it, but I am not good with guitar, just a beginner. But will sing it with complete music someday, for sure...:)
And you are a keen observer, you got it correct great suggestions, I'll keep them in mind for my upcoming writings. Here I've used "getting" for the purpose of showing possessiveness only...
Thank you again, every review from you is always helpful...:)
I enjoy this very much, it has an eye catching title, which is always the best. Though, everything has ways it can get better. My suggestions being, the way every line is capitalized is a bit distracting to the reader. I would suggest capitalizing only where a new sentence begins. Another would be a few spelling errors, but otherwise a lovely write(:
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Thank you so much for reviewing and the advice. I'll keep these things in mind and improve my writin.. read moreThank you so much for reviewing and the advice. I'll keep these things in mind and improve my writing...
A wonderful piece on love. When a person is in love he feels the presence of her beloved everywhere he looks upon. The repitation of some sentences make your piece musical . The diction is simple and expressive.
Keep writing ...
Have a lovely day!
This makes a great set of lyrics! I'd love to hear is set to music, maybe something with acoustic guitar.
NOTES:
"Getting" you sounds possessive or vindictive to me. Just a couple of suggestions: "Just getting you is," Maybe "Just holding you is" or "Just gaining your love is"
Yeah these are the lyrics, I can sing it, but I am not good with guitar, just a beginner. But will s.. read moreYeah these are the lyrics, I can sing it, but I am not good with guitar, just a beginner. But will sing it with complete music someday, for sure...:)
And you are a keen observer, you got it correct great suggestions, I'll keep them in mind for my upcoming writings. Here I've used "getting" for the purpose of showing possessiveness only...
Thank you again, every review from you is always helpful...:)
So I'm back after a small gap of 5 months. I have more than 1200 RRs, sorry I won't be able to read them all, only the latest. Thank you for reading and reviewing my writings. :)
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