This makes a great set of lyrics! I'd love to hear is set to music, maybe something with acoustic guitar.
NOTES:
"Getting" you sounds possessive or vindictive to me. Just a couple of suggestions: "Just getting you is," Maybe "Just holding you is" or "Just gaining your love is"
Yeah these are the lyrics, I can sing it, but I am not good with guitar, just a beginner. But will s.. read moreYeah these are the lyrics, I can sing it, but I am not good with guitar, just a beginner. But will sing it with complete music someday, for sure...:)
And you are a keen observer, you got it correct great suggestions, I'll keep them in mind for my upcoming writings. Here I've used "getting" for the purpose of showing possessiveness only...
Thank you again, every review from you is always helpful...:)
Beautiful and positive words for love.
"Yeah I just know is,
Am in love with you.
In love with you..."
I like the flow of thoughts and the joy of love in the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Love is in the air! PTL! I have read several poems today about LOVE,
and they keep getting better and better, terrific write! Thanks for sharing
and b-blessed!
Yes, very lyrical piece. Also, meaningful and emotive at the same time. There is not a single thing you have left undescrined about the uncertainity about his own feelings, one goes through in love. Very interesting write.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you so much Penny, I'm glad you liked it...:)
Yeah I just know I (not is),
Am in love with you.
In love with you...
Someone's getting TOOOOOO romantic these days yeah! ;)
What I love about your poems is you give a a pure love's image that never turns vulgar!
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9 Years Ago
These days? Lol, my mind works in just one direction, mostly...:p
thank you Khyati...:)
So it makes me feel alright that I have felt this way, whatever it means, wherever I am drifting or going in life, there is a destination and I don't know where, but at least someone to have felt this way, yea that is a good feeling, maybe the best, if only now I have to apply it to some common goal and respect others, these unknown others, I think this poem will make tomorrow possible that I can greet others without feeling a burden or unpleasant presence on them which I make of a situation if I feel threatened which one should not when you don't know the other ones anyway, one must just wait and see and try to figure out what one is supposed to be doing, how they supposed to act, etc, whenever possible, I have to buy mini marshmallows and drop off my child at school, doesn't seem so difficult, when the other people doing work for him, so and it isn't, so he is working, I should help someone, what a nice thing to be able to figure out languages
So I'm back after a small gap of 5 months. I have more than 1200 RRs, sorry I won't be able to read them all, only the latest. Thank you for reading and reviewing my writings. :)
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