Oceans in my eyes...

A sad poem full of negative energy...

What I expected,
and what I've got.
Just some shattered dreams,
and a hell to rot...

 

Looking at the past,
the path I've walked.
The decisions that I made,
and hell yeah, am shocked...

 

I can't mend,
the damage I've done.
I took my chances,
And I could have won...

 

It's not that I didn't try,
It's not that I didn't cry.
The only fault was,
the happiness that I couldn't buy...

 

Now look at me,
What else've i got?
Just some mixed thoughts,
I'll take them to the grave and rot!

 

There's not much left,
No more place for lies.
Don't look at me people,
I'm holding oceans in my eyes...

Author's Note

Kindly review it...

Reviews

[Lola_Bee]

I can feel so much disappointment and sadness in this piece, very well put together. I would say to this person in the poem to chin up, cheer up, the world is yours too take, never regret because you are still alive, and if you are alive you can still change your situation

[Sanjh]

Thanks for the review and the advice...:)

[maria ( rose)]

You are truly an inspiring writer. The way you convey your messages are truly unique. Keep up the great work ! thanks for the friendship♥

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much, these sure are big words of appreciation for me.
And thanks to you for accepting my friend request...:)

[Johanna]

Very powerful, liked it more and more as I read, and the end is simply perfect. So strong, so sad and yes powerful. Wonderful job on this, hope things get better.

[Sanjh]

Thnak you so much for the kind words...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the tone and reason for the poem.
"There's not much left,
No more place for lies.
Don't look at me people,
I'm holding oceans in my eyes..."
Some the thoughts of ocean can be enough. Great description brought to life life and real emotion. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sanjh]

Thank you Coyote. I appreciate the review...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[ayesha gupta]

well..it was awesomely written poem with too much agony. life takes turns..so we shouldnt think sadness is the last stop. keep your seat-belts tight and just enjoy the ride. :)

[Sanjh]

Well said Ayesha, thank you for reading...:)

[ayesha gupta]

my pleasure. :)

[Mohamed Al Banna]

It reeks of the bitter sorrow yet it's redolent of creativeness and elegance. I thought it to be an excellent poem.

[Sanjh]

thank you so much...:)

[Lúcia]

And the ocean is infinite, therefore hopeful.


Loved it!

[Sanjh]

true...
Thank you ...:)

[Lúcia]

You are welcome. :)

[Shitsune Hyuuga]

Failure...that's what I think this is all about. Feels like the world has turned its back on you 'cause of just some one simple mistake. That happens, a lot and it sucks, but don't let it put you down the persona must look on the brighter side of being alive and enjoy this world.

[Sanjh]

yeah it's true. Whatever happens, life goes on, and we should look at the bright side...thanks for reading...:)

[Confuser]

Seeing past mistakes can be painful and you've expressed it quite well. I really like the poem. Your sorrow and regret is clear, and anger comes through quite clearly. I look forward to reading more. Thank you.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much for appreciating...:)

[Confuser]

You're quite welcome.

[R Smith]

that's really sad Sanjh, you used the negative energy though and made a positive poem of strength and beauty, which is always how to use bad feelings, bravo :)

[Sanjh]

Thanks for reading, getting reviews from you always makes me smile ...:)

[Prakruti]

Liked the title "Oceans in my eyes"
Nicely written words of pain, disappointments and regret.

[Sanjh]

Thanks for reading Prakruti...:)

[Prakruti]

Anytime :)