All That I Have.

Keep fighting for what you want.

I am not a celebrity,
I don't have a luxury car.
I am just an ordinary guy,
And I can't buy you any star...

 

I am not a magician,
That can work wonders.
I am just an ordinary guy,
Who makes too many blunders.

 

I am not a soldier,
But I've been fighting.
Beaten to dust everytime,
But from the dust still rising.

 

And I am still here,
fighting for what I crave.
Trying my best,
it's all the love I have to give...

Author's Note

Kindly review it.

Reviews

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

We are not heroes, but we live and we have to live life with by the things we have learned living. It's called experience. We can't get experience without making mistakes, without failing. But each time, I think we become stronger. To try our best is all we can do. You have written this in your poem and its all true. Liked it.

[Sanjh]

Thank you Rudi...:)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Alway my pleasure, Sanjh :)

Rudi

[Surya pradha]

loved the third stanza

I am not a soldier,
But I've been fighting.
Beaten to dust everytime,
But from the dust still rising.

awesome,dood!

[Gurleen Saluja]

Beaten to dust every time, but from the dust still rising. Beautifully quoted. An inspirational write. Thanks for sharing.

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much Gurleen...:)

[Gurleen Saluja]

You are welcome :)

[AprilRN1210]

I like the repetition in this one.. that you are just an ordinary guy... not superman, not rich, not famous.. and all you have is love.. but that is the best of all..(in my opinion).... the meter is off in a lot of places and would switch some of the wording around to tighten it up a bit.. would help tremendously with the flow..

few suggestions.. (just my opinion, for what it is worth)...

the first stanza is nice, but would maybe reword the last line.. maybe something like.. (and not some fancy rock star)..

second stanza would add "too" before the word "many".... helps make the rhyme feel less forced..

next stanza is lovely, and my favorite and wouldn't change anything.. meter isn't perfect, but flow is still nice...

last stanza used "fighting" again.. and crave and "have" doesn't rhyme really.. would probably word this to a near rhyme maybe.. understand why keeping the wording in the last line as it is the title, but as it is, doesn't sound right and makes me stumble... maybe something like...

And yet, I am still here
yearning for my other half
learning along the journey
that love is all that I have.

overall nice sentiment of love conquers all and resilience and determination win in the end.. well done..

[Sanjh]

Thank you so much for reading April. And also for so many helpful inputs.
I'd definitely make the changes as per your suggestions, It's sounding way better with the corrections.
Thank you so much again...:)

[AprilRN1210]

you're more than welcome.. glad I could help.. :)

[Sindu]

Simple and sound! The repetition gives more emphasis to the message. Very nice!

Love the lines: Beaten to dust everytime
but from the dust still rising.

[Sanjh]

thanks for appreciating...:)

[Sindu]

You are welcome :)

[Aparna]

Great piece! I loved the line "I am just an ordinary guy", which is repeated twice. I personally feel the poem would be much more awesome, if you could add "I am just an ordinary guy" again before the last line.

Maybe,

And I am still here,
fighting for what I crave.
I am just an ordinary guy,
Giving all the love that I have...

Just my opinion :-) Beautiful poem

[Sanjh]

yeah, nice suggestion. It''ll make the poem more powerful...

thanks...:)

[Shadows Ember]

Again, i suggest the capitalizing every line is distracting but i overall enjoyed this piece. I love how the rhyming flows smoothly with the topic.

[Sanjh]

Thanks again for the advice, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[Shadows Ember]

you are very welcome

[Prakruti]

One more perfect poem!
The stanza I liked most is

I am not a magician,
That can work wonders.
I am just an ordinary guy,
Who makes many blunders.

Keep writing and sharing!
It helps new writers :)

[Sanjh]

Thanks again for appreciating Prakruti. I am also a new writer, still learning and I'll try my best...

thanks again...:)

[R Smith]

good poem, i like it a lot, you say it like it is, we can't all be celebrities with a mega rich life style, we do the best we can, thank you Sanjh :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you for appreciating Sir...:)

[M.A.Rathore]

Again we have a nice poem written in a superb manner. The feelings are so generous that they convey the central theme. I really enjoy this short a sweet poem which is full of message.. I like the two stanza as this...

I am not a soldier,
But I've been fighting.
Beaten to dust everytime,
But from the dust still rising.

And I am still here,
fighting for what I crave.
Trying my best,
But it's love all that I have...

Keep writing...
Have a nice time...

[Sanjh]

thank you for appreciating...:)

[M.A.Rathore]

Welcome always...

[Dakota Jean]

Great poem. Very strong and relatable. Keep up the great work (:

[Sanjh]

Thanks for appreciating, I'll try my best...:)