Towards The End...

A sadistic poem for New Year, symbolizing disappointment. I wrote it in 2011.

IT'S THE LAST DAY,
THIS YEAR'S LAST NIGHT.
LAST CHANCE OF THIS TIME,
TO MAKE ALL THE WRONGS RIGHT.
TRYING TO WORK ON THINGS,
DAMAGE THAT I CAN MEND.
BUT IT ALL SEEMS NUISANCE,
AS AM WALKING TOWARDS THE END...
 
ANOTHER YEAR IS ABOUT TO PASS,
ANOTHER YEAR IS ABOUT TO START.
IT'S A NEW MORNING,
A NEW WORLD,
WITH NEW HOPES AND OPPORTUNITIES.
THE NEW WORLD WITH NEW PROMISES,
BUT IT ALL SEEMS NUISANCE,
AS AM WALKING TOWARDS THE END...
 
AM THINKING THE UNTHINKABLE,
AM BEARING THE UNBEARABLE.
MOVING WITH THE WIND,
BUT THE WIND ITSELF IS SO MISERABLE.
TRYING TO LEARN FROM MISTAKES,
DON'T WANT TO REPEAT THEM AGAIN.
BUT IT ALL SEEMS NUISANCE,
AS AM WALKING TOWARDS THE END...
 
LIVING AN INSIGNIFICANT LIFE,
WITH NOTHING YET ACHIEVED.
JUST THE WASTE OF OPPORTUNITIES,
AND AM HELL LOT AGGRIEVED.
LIVING AT THE EDGE,
TRYING TO SUCCEED.
BUT ALL IT SEEMS NUISANCE,
AS AM WALKING TOWARDS THE END...

Author's Note

Kindly provide your views...

Reviews

[Penny]

Reminds me of Arnold's 'Dover Beach' . The poem is pessimistic but interesting. Also, the obscurity of the theme makes it kind of mystical, the way you take us into gloominess and out again and again inside. Very nicely here, you have revisited the thought that New year is nothing but celebration of 'end'. How we celebrate growing older each year and moving slowly and gradually towards death. Very well done.

[Sanjh]

Yeah, it's ironic, thank you for reading...:)

[Surya pradha]

an intense and expressive poem. as good as your others. you should think of making a poetry book or something!

[Sanjh]

Thank you for liking it so much Surya. And also for the advice, maybe I'll write, someday...:)

[R Smith]

a downbeat view of the new year, it comes in with a moan and a groan and boy do i know that feeling, very good writing Sanjh, excellent poem :)

[Sanjh]

Thank you sir, I'm glad you liked it...:)

[MomzillaNC]

It's so true, sometimes it's all just a nuisance and you feel your wasting your time and effort. Life just doesn't often let us see the good results in shining spotlights -- but, boy howdy, when things go wrong, the klaxons blare loud and long!

NOTES: I think you should take most of the lines out of all caps. Maybe just your refrain in all caps. Below are some suggested copy edits:
BUT IT ALL SEEMS [A] NUISANCE,
AS [I'M] WALKING TOWARDS THE END...
Another [year's] about to [pass…]
Another [year's] about to [start…]
[I'm] thinking the unthinkable.
[I'm] bearing the unbearable.
[And, I'm] [a helluva] lot aggrieved.

[Prakruti]

Liked the unique phrases..the boldness creates a strong impression on reader's mind!
Really good.

[Sanjh]

Thank you for appreciating...:)

[Sophy Freebirds]

First of all harsh.. its spelled nuisance not nuisence. Other than that its a powerful poem.you spilled your guts out here i guess..hell yeah
Disappointment sucks but the frustation which you feel is what i can connect .no fancy metaphors just simple lines unveiling your thoughts..the repetition of same line enhances the affect on reader 's mind. Overall a good one

~Sophy

[Sanjh]

Thanks for the honest opinion, sharp eyes and I'll correct the mistakes as soon as possible.
Thank you again...:)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Was a pleasure reading your work :)

[Sanjh]

pleasure is all mine...:)