First Kiss

The moment dawned onto me a few days ago.

 

 

Young and naïve.

Scared to death,

If this moment would

Even go right.

 

 

Deeply in love,

With this boy

And wondering

When and Who

Is going to make

The move.

 

Within a flash,

And in lasting of a few seconds,

The deed was done.

 

Sweet and moist

Texture of the act.

Just barley a full kiss.

But it happened and

The moment was gold!

It was the moment of her

First kiss

xoxo

Author's Note

I did this the other night. What do you think?

Reviews

[Robert Balfour]

Oh, how I wish my first kiss was so splendid! I loved this piece. You do a fine job at describing the anxiety one feels when put in such a situation. Good work.

[Emily Rose]

This is a great description of a first kiss! You really capture the hesitation, the fear, the excitement... it's a great description and a great topic for a poem. Well done!

[Robert Clapp]

i hope my first kiss is this nice. (yeah, i haven't kissed a girl yet. pathetic, isn't it?)

(you're pretty, by the way. eek.)

[Kenneth Miles]

I liked this. My first kiss wasn't as great. Braces = kissing no-no.

[Kaela Craven]

"Just barely a full kiss.
But it happened..."

I liked that line =)

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Captivating little composition, encapsulating a romantically nostalgic moment in time, with a few, but poignant lines of verse (from a young girl's heart).

Extremely well composed!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[An owl on the moon]

Such a soft innocence about this, moving gently toward this most thrilling of moments... Loved your tender approach to something so life changing! Excellent!!!

[Artist...well....ACTOR!]

I like it.....it realli captures the essence of a first kiss.....lol
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