Drinking Poison

Why is Hated my emotion for you?

You stare at me, I stare back at you.

Oh, how my black hole feeds off of you.

Why is Lust my emotion for you?

You kiss me, I kiss you back.

Oh, how my voided heart fills then empties.

Over and over again, pumping the drug of you.

Oh, how you pity me as i drink the poison of you

Filling my body with the corrosive acid of the consequences 

of my own choices.

Why do I let you do this to me?

Why do I do this to me?

Involuntary suicide.

No, this is suicide.

This is me killing myself over decisions that should have

never been made.

This is me drowning through dissolved lungs.

Dying because my blood is boiling.

My black hole of a void is hungry.

Feed me it said.

And i did.

I drank more poison expecting you to die.

Reviews

[KCthelastboyscout]

The majority of what I read in the cafe is heartache and pain and dealing with the damage after. This is one of the best expressions of that topic that I have read. Reading the words are painting pictures in my head.a very unique view of writing well done.

[Sammie Sanchez]

thank you C:

[RageFro5t]

Nicely written. The ability to paint a picture of the love you have.

[Manasa.L]

Truly these are words of anger and rage. It pretty simplifies the notion behind it. You have drunk the poison and waiting for the other to die. There is a saying Forgive if you want to forget. So you just have to learn to do it friend.

[apennylate]

If only we could intake more of someone until they died... This dissolved my yes till I was left high-fiving suicide... Hah... Poisoningly penned...

[CMC]

Lots of good metaphors. It reminds me of the quote "Holding on to anger is like drinking poison and expecting the other person to die," because you're trying to kill the voice that begs for your suffering by drinking poison that will make it stronger.

[Mel Jayne]

Hi, nice poem, very lyrical and poetic. Do you mean never been made? that might make more sense. I also think that if you used dissolving instead of dissolved it might be a bit better flowing. This is really well done, you are very talented.

[Sammie Sanchez]

Fixed it, cx thanks for telling me my mistake

[Taz]

Wow, this is quite strong. I love how you used a metaphor for the love. Well penned.

[Sammie Sanchez]

welp, i tried my best to describe how im feeling so yeah

[Taz]

You did an amazing job, it was very visual.