Heavy breathing

This is the after sex poem

Heavy breathing

Not uncommon when my heart is trying to thumping a million times per second, as I lay next you.

Heavy breathing

Because my lips are too swollen to speak to you

Heavy breathing

As your eyes caress every curve, every crevice, every beautiful, and every ugly part of my body

Heavy breathing

As I remember why you are laying so close to me.

Heavy breathing

My lips quiver at the memory they were left with only moments ago.

Heavy breathing

Then I lean in to refresh that memory

Heavy breathing

As I touch your everything as though it was the first time
Feeling your skin, so smooth in my hands, kissing your lips once more to entertain my mouth with
your taste.

Heavy breathing

Reviews

[Enigma Monster]

Very effective use of repetition. It's as if with each new breath, a new memory or realization...comes.
PS - I love puns.

[Sammie Sanchez]

Hah that actually made me laugh

[Relic]

You've described and repeated the part that is most prominent in a lover's mind and body. It's exciting.

Nice poem.

[Sammie Sanchez]

Thank you I tried to make it realistic

[Relic]

When a person feels like they're next to you as you describe what you're feeling in the moment, you know you're doing good. ;)

[Sammie Sanchez]

Thanks this means alot

[MAC]

a sensual, yet beautifully written piece. it deserves more reviews. excellent write!

[Sammie Sanchez]

Well Thank you