Making things up

She sits in Her room, making up,

 

Creative things?  Destructive things.

 lies to fling,

  weapons to swing.

 

A pile of used relationships in the corner

Little jewled bits of misery, used to adorn her

When she's saved up enough, they'll be weaved

into a cloak

covering her from foot to throat

only her face left to us.

 

To me its a plea.

 

"Please grieve

or

at least emote."

 

 

 

Author's Note

First time being able to format the poem on someone elses PC, so now i can start being more creative with font and arrangment. Not that I think that makes a poem, its still just words, if their crap words its a crap poem :)

Reviews

[Parsimony]

No, I like the thought out format. It does make a difference. Sry, I’ve been gone for awhile. I wasn’t inspired while living life. I’m now a cafe supervisor. FYI it’s not a crap poem. Not even close.

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was very creative, yet painted a very symbolic picture. I really enjoyed this. xo Winter

[Samuel Jack]

That's what I like to hear Ms Winter, you also said a lot with a few words with your review. :)
read moreThat's what I like to hear Ms Winter, you also said a lot with a few words with your review. :)

Dank u wel (Dutch for thank you very much)

[FlatLineBeauty]

I will def love to read more of your work and you will see more of my reviews. Take care, darling. xo

[Dye]

Seems as though the pain throughout her past relationships have taking their toll. This line "Little jeweled bits of misery, used to adorn her" is just great. We do tend to wear our emotions, I like the way you presented that concept. This is a fantastic poem, regardless of formatting (which I do like BTW). I do agree with your author's note "crap words", you are right- no amount of creative arrangement can fix that. You have a winner here however.

[Samuel Jack]

Thanks for the review, BUT YOU GOT IT WRONG!! HOW DARE YOU!!

:) only joking darling, just pokin a bit of fun.

Any review is welcome, especially when the reviewer puts so much effort in.

Gracias Amiga

[Dye]

Haha-- this made me laugh.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Very interesting and way to get creative with presentation lol.A good poem:)

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you very much. You'll be hearing from me soon, so polish up those poems for inspection! ;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha that a threat mister lol

[Samuel Jack]

I want all letters, words and sentences present and in good order when I arrive!

Reviews incoming!!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha d****t it is a threat!!!!!

[Sami Khalil]

This one proves you great creativity...:)........................

[Samuel Jack]

Thanks dost

[Sami Khalil]

MY pleasure...:).....................

[FocusedAmnesia]

The way it's formatted definitely gave your words a descriptive enhamcement, and the rhyming flows well, not forced or like you're trying hard to do it. Good read.

[JR Darewood]

you know, writing a poem where the rhymes actually add to, in place of distract from, the content and imagery is really rare. I love the weaving of used relationship into a cloak. Awesome, thought-provoking poem that packs a huge punch with just a few words.

[Samuel Jack]

, I've only started writing in the last 6 months, so rhymes are a huge temptation. I find i write the best poetry when I'm trying to write my book! :) thank you for the great review

[Katiya K]

The different formatting of the line definitely gave the poem a punch! AND the imagery is quite amazing! Weaving misery and sorrow into a cloak...golly. That's a pretty powerful line there! Nicely done and so much fun to read!

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you very much. The arrangement definatly has an effect.

[ANTO]

Im liking this adventurous bent Samuel. I can see many layers in this work (the phrase 'making up' has lots of connotations) - like a flowchart the reader can follow many different routes.
You've thrown down a challange here and asked the reader to bring their self to the table and indugle...
Very generous write mate.

[Samuel Jack]

I think you sir, are being generous. If you can see all that in the poem then I'm very excited, I'm going to reread the beast, has it being mutating behind my back!? My poems are rarely very cryptic (I think) but they are art, and expression is a tough old b*****d to nail down.

Nice one dude.