Simple things

Short poem on enjoying the simple things in life

The Trees,The Breeze
The pleasure of these












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Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Amazing how you write short things but long on meanings...:)......................

[Samuel Jack]

It's not amazing my friend, it's pure laziness :)

But thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

I guess laziness come handy sometimes...lol

[FocusedAmnesia]

Only eight words, but powerful and true.

[JenniferMarie]

A lot of meaning in few words. I really like that. nicely done. Reminds us that the simple things in life bring joy. Sometimes people forget the beauty of nature. I liked this poem.

[justjenn_2u]

Stated so well in such few words. I imagine myself beneath these trees in a hammock. Nice short one. Write on....

[Samuel Jack]

Thanks, it was one of those poems that just arrive in your brain.

Love "write on" I usually say "keep up the good words"

[Vria P Crow]

The rhyme between of Trees and Breeze and These is s i m p l i s t i c and t e r r i f i c!

It is the pleasure of Nature that transcends inspiration. It is an Artist's wet dream if you ask me.

You sir, are a Dreamweaver!

sincerely,
ria

[Samuel Jack]

Very nice review Ms Benthil, full of your usual fervour. And a dreamweaver! A nice notion, but I've a long road of words ahead of me before I can claim that!

*humble bow* Domo arigoto

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you, kindly!

haha Everyone is a Dreamweaver. All poets are.

*curtsy*

Ms. Benthil

p.s. I have been working on the Review for the Mirror poem for a long time since it is one that I have connected to the most.

[Samuel Jack]

CpasEEba moy Druk.

[Vria P Crow]

Babble fish is mean! haha May I ask what it means?

[Samuel Jack]

Russian for thank you my friend

[Vria P Crow]

you are welcome
emoclew era uoy

Mirror, rorrim :)

My Proffessor tells me I need to read more Russian Literature. I am beginning to see his point.

[Samuel Jack]

What the hell was that!? Swedish? I have to know!

[Vria P Crow]

LMAO HAHA I only wrote it backwards.

[Vria P Crow]

However, I have made up my own language.

Ou shi ma se caw.
Ari mu la tu ne.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You can't get much simpler than this... It is odd the power that the perfect words placed in the perfect order can create a feeling or a thought. Using your same words:

The breeze in the trees--
the pleasure of these

Doesn't work nearly as well as what you produced. This is what I love about poetry...word choice and phrasing as so important. Well done!

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you very much, it means a lot coming from someone I consider a formidable poet.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You humble me...the pleasure was all mine.

[quinfinn]

sometimes less is more. this is a shining example of that euphemism. nicely conveyed and well expressed.

[Samuel Jack]

When I wrote it down I had a moment of doubt that it was TOO simple, but it's been well received, thank you for your comments.

[quinfinn]

when you stop doubting, you become complacent and barren....it is a process. i think you have talent....roll with it.

[Samuel Jack]

Domo arigoto

[quinfinn]

de nada! und bitte!

[Samuel Jack]

शुक्रीया बहुत, pazhalaSTA Moi druk! I Love languages thanks for that.

[Vria P Crow]

HAHA Sorry for interrupting, but this language tickled my funny bone!

[quinfinn]

languages are the symphonies of humanity

[Vria P Crow]

Oh, I concur. The lettering is entrancing.

[Samuel Jack]

You mean the Hindi? It is beautiful. नमस्ते दोस्त

[Vria P Crow]

I agree. :) It is stunning, my friend!

[Paula]

Priceless!

(the poem "fleas" comes to mind, for it's brevity)

Great lines here.

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you, I guess people really do appreciate the simple things in life.

[Traci]

Love the simplicity of this, Samuel. After each word I found myself pausing and really absorbing, realizing just how much pleasure I do take in nature and the surreal calmness it gives. Very well done, my friend.

[Samuel Jack]

Thank you, it was so tempting to add more.

[Traci]

I'm glad you didn't :) My imagination took me there.

[The Sun Princess]

so simple and elegant, what a lovely writing style you have! Your minimalism draws strict attention to your words and stresses their importance.

Very powerful and engaging.
Great work!

[Samuel Jack]

Wow thank you, this was more a cone down from prose poetry, but I'm always surprised by which poems get the most interest.

Thank you very much for the enthusiastic review. Reviews your way incoming!